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EARLY TECHONOLOGICAL DEVELOPMENTS BROUGHT MORE BENEFITS AND CHANGES TO THE LIVES OF ORDINARY PEOPLE THAN RECENT TECHONOLOGICAL DEVELOPMENTS. WHAT IS YOUR OPINION?

There is a hot discussion between early and recent technological developments, which will bring more advantages to people. Everybody has their own thinkings. In my opinion, they all give benefits from their styles and make life more comfortable and convenient.

As for the early technological developments, it built a big step to change the world from the agricultural era to industrial time. That leads to the birth of many manufactories, machines and devices, which helps human in work. For example, the born of the farming machine, the farmers, in the past, waste many time to harvest plants on the big fields, leading to the quantity of product is low. So the farming machines are manufactured to save time and increase the quality and quantity of results. The farmer's lives are more developed. Moreover, the plane is the most significant creation of human, heavy materials can be carried and transferred to a long distance. Not only that but also reduce time to go abroad. Furthermore, the born of the motor turbine, telephone, electricity and artificial light (lightbulbs) also brings benefits to people. Hence, the old developments are seen as the wings between two periods of era.

Regarding the recent technological developments, it establishes a new perception of the human being. New machines come out not only be used but also be fashion. For example, iPhone was created in 2007 by Steve Jobs, the very first smartphone with touch screen and one button, which is like a boom in handheld gadget development and every people always want to have one. At this time, iPhone is now becoming a piece of luxurious jewelry and bring respect from others to ownership. Following with iPhone, it is the internet. This is a digital good can connect people internationally without caring for geographical distance and bring the in-time updated news from over the world to your home. Nowadays, the industry 4.0 target to the automatical era with artificial intelligence to make life easier and happier.

In conclusion, both early and recent development have their own benefits but they still give human comfort and convenience. Additionally, the life style will be improved to be better with modern devices.

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