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uyen1092

Oct 27, 2019

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: HOW TO SPEND LEISURE TIME IN THE MOST BENEFICIAL WAY? [2]

Hi,
In my opinion, your content is great and well-structured. However, I notice that there are two grammatical mistakes that would make the meaning of whole sentence inappropriate.

- The important relax time: I guess you meant that "The importance of relaxing time". I suggest you changing the words to "spare time" or "leisure time" with the same meanings.

- Some days may seem more tiring ... else: You may be right, but I consider this sentence was not clear enough because I can't get what you meant exactly. I think that "some days" cannot be tiring and stressful, this should be replaced by subjects indicating humans (namely we, they), changed the adjective "tiring" to "tired" and added adverb "sometimes" .

uyen1092

Oct 20, 2019

Writing Feedback / Changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles [3]

Hi everyone, this is the first time I have ever written my answer for IELTS Writing Task 1. I hope everyone would comment and give feedbacks for me! Please tell me what I need to improve! Many thanks!!

the proportion of vehicle registration

The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph is here: drive.google.com/file/d/11BG_FD37OOwXuzN0vOpMpOAJF9_2DFU1/view?usp=drivesdk

And this is my answer:

The graph shows the proportion of vehicle registration of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US in the period of 1970 to 2010.

It is clear that the graph shows significant changes of the proportion during each stage.
In the first stage, from 1970 to 1980, the growth of taxi had increasing rapidly from about 22% to 36%, while the growth of bus also increased significantly by 9%. However, the registration of truck had a big degradation from 49% down to 30%.

Unlike in the first stage, the proportion of truck in the second stage (between 1980 and 2000)rose to 45%, while the proportion of bus fell by 12%. After a big degradation between 1980 and 2000, the proportion of taxi rose rapidly to 45%.