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Posts by garrick
Joined: Oct 6, 2009
Last Post: Jan 9, 2015
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garrick   
Jan 9, 2015
Graduate / I was fifteen when I first used a Computer - Personal Statement for MBA - Southampton [4]

Thank you vangiespen, you are absolutely right. There is no point writing what is already included in my CV. I have revised the essay, what do you think of it? Thank you for your time and assistance. Please read this instead

Right from my childhood, I have always considered myself to be a goal oriented individual with creative and enthusiastic methods to problem solving. I was born into a difficult family environment and had to depend on these qualities to overcome social and educational. I also learnt early on, the influence of choices on goals and vice versa. I watched my uncle try to break out of the family cycle. I would see him suffer through his several endeavors and whenever I asked him why he kept on pushing, we would say there are only two clear choices in life (1) to back out of goal-plans and stay in the comfort zone of being "reasonable" or (2) to take it on as a challenge, solve it and seize the opportunity to be in charge of destiny. It is these qualities and philosophy that has taken me from being a child with no prospect to being one of the youngest successful technology strategists in Nigeria.

My interest in strategy dates back to my school days. During secondary school, I was fascinated with the computer and its capacity to solve everyday problem. I spent several hours daily pondering upon how technology tools could be effectively used to solve problems around me. Hacking tools to provide functionality beyond manufacturer's intent soon became a hobby and then a life goal. Like every goal I have, I make a mental note of what is required; skills and the knowledge needed to accomplish it and then tackle each aspect one step at a time.

In the last six years I have made tremendous strides in accomplishing my goal. I have progressed, with great effort, in the technology field. I started my career at seventeen, as a freelance programmer. Knowing I had little or no chance at a credible job due to my age and inexperience, I spent the next two years establishing a presence within the technology field. I volunteered technology services to several non-profits. Working for non-profits turned out to be more beneficial than I had hoped for. Limited funds and workforce at several non-profit organizations meant that I had take on roles such as strategy definition and analysis, which were beyond my primary scope. Over time I began to recognize that these non-technical disciplines both appealed to my interests and engaged a variety of my strengths, from interpersonal skills to problem-solving capabilities.

My experience opened the door to many Job opportunities. During the following years I moved on to the private sector, working as a project manager and business strategist for an advisory firm. My role as a business strategist and project manager saw me work across different environment; government and private. My most influential experience was redefining the pension distribution process for a regional government in Nigeria. Dealing with the Nigerian government opened my eyes to a totally different perspective of business. Businesses seek maximum efficiency; governments seek sufficient efficiency. I was initially overwhelmed at the potential for failure due to my inexperience in government process but I quickly overcome that and went on to build a successful project with the support of a diverse an experience team of strategist.

I could be considered successful by a lot of my peers but I'm still far from my ultimate goal, which is to be the founder of a disruptive technology company by the age of 30. I am yet again faced with a life changing decision to either stay in the comfort zone of my perceived success or take on my ultimate challenge. I have chosen the latter.

However, despite my experience, I still lack some important entrepreneur virtue and knowledge required to take the next step in my career. These virtues; managerial development and problem finding are represented in the bedrock of Southampton's MBA program. My desire to internalize these qualities is the catalyst that drives me to pursue a Southampton's MBA with such conviction.

I also want the journey; I want to see the world of business from an European perspective; I want to engage in intellectual discussions with exceptional peers from different backgrounds all bringing their own values and approaches to business situations; I want to share my experiences and get to learn from the experience of others. I want to build the next layer upon my foundation.
garrick   
Jan 6, 2015
Graduate / I was fifteen when I first used a Computer - Personal Statement for MBA - Southampton [4]

My personal statement for MBA. Please critique. Thanks

I was fifteen when I first used a Computer. It was the most fascinating electronic device I had ever seen. My dad owned a typewriter and spent most part of his evenings on it, I would see him get frustrated whenever he made a mistake and had to retype a document. Then, In 2005 I was given a computer as a birthday gift. I was amazed at its ability to perform the functions of a typewriter without the hiccups associated with it. As I explored the computer system more, I discovered its capacity to solve problems. At that instance, I made it my life mission to produce computer tools that would make life easier for people.

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garrick   
Jan 6, 2015
Graduate / INTEGRITY, ORGANIZATIONAL EXCELLENCE and PLANNED SOCIAL CONTRIBUTION - MENDOZA MBA ESSAY [2]

Great writing. I think you should revise the first paragraph to immediately grab the attention of your reader. You could start with something like: "I would be dead...". Also, i suggest you include a project that really shows your problem solving skill. The training is more of managerial task than a solution. However, you could portray the task as a process redefinition - which it is i assume, thus showing the reader a fundamental skill (business strategy) required for MBA.

Your writing is good
garrick   
Oct 6, 2009
Undergraduate / I never really thought about college; Why you choose to attend UCF [6]

We all make choices, some easy and some not so easy, most choices depend on how we perceive the world and the people around us. The decision to go to College is, in itself, a difficult decision as choosing which college (at least it was for me).

Growing up as a child not knowing the value of education (not until I was in my 10th grade) I never really thought about college. I was less interested in academics and more interested in what my peer groups loved: Music. I held musician in high esteem and made a couple of them my role model: I wanted to be just like the rap artists I saw on television. I was most fascinated by their success; it never had anything to do with a college education. Most of them for example like the rags-to-riches story of a lone guitarist who wrote a great song and made it big overnight, but never got past the 10th grade? These stories (however shallow they may be) hinted me that a college education isn't a necessary step towards good fortune (4 years, or simply overnight? The choice is simple for some people!). What I did not acknowledge is that even though anything is possible, nothing is definite and without a college education, the word nothing receives much emphasis.

Since after my 9th grade, I have learned that where I end up in life is not as important as the person I become through the journey of life. I choose to apply to the University of Central Florida because I know UCF will prepare me for my transition into the real world, significantly educate me and allow me to become ethically and socially responsible in utilizing my knowledge in pursuit of a better community and applying my innate and acquired skills to the task of helping others in this world.

The University of Central Florida has a diverse and exciting global environment in which to study. I derive success often by creating a balance between my social and academic life and I like to be around new things and ideas, which I believe the University of Central Florida could provide for me. From French Club to International Student Association to the German Club, there's a little bit of everything. The student life at the University of Central Florida is most idea for me.

During my years at The University of Central Florida, i hope to go beyond just receiving an education in a facility where education is highly valuable and intellectual thoughts prosper but thrive to contribute and make a mark in The University and the world, contribute to the society and make a difference.
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