Erinma
Dec 10, 2019
Writing Feedback / [IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Rewarding outstanding employees by giving them extra money [6]
@UN27042000
Your essay is so good. However, the conclusion seem to introduce a new perspective or statement (thereby straying away from the main topic). A conclusion should be the paraphrasing of the question asked plus the summary of the the points made in paragraph one and two. In this type of essay You can introduce another advice or perspective ( like you did) after you have done this.
@UN27042000
Your essay is so good. However, the conclusion seem to introduce a new perspective or statement (thereby straying away from the main topic). A conclusion should be the paraphrasing of the question asked plus the summary of the the points made in paragraph one and two. In this type of essay You can introduce another advice or perspective ( like you did) after you have done this.
