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Dec 11, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 1 - The rate of women's literacy and population growth in selected countries [2]
Good evening everyone!
Would you mind to give me some advice for my writing task 1? Below are the topic and my answer.
The graph below show the rate of women's literacy and population growth to selected countries from 1998 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of female literacy and population growth in different Asian countries during the period from 1998 to 2000.
As is shown by the graph, there was a correlation between the women's literacy and the birthrate throughout two years. Thailand and Columbia who experienced the largest proportion of educated women, accounted for 96% and the low level of the population growth, namely under 1.9%. By contrast, the highest birthrate is believed that it was the original root for the bottom level of female literacy in Yemen Arab Rep. and Afghanistan, approximately 4% and 8.5% respectively. In the same way, Mali, Sudan, Pakistan and Dominican Rep underwent the high level of birthrate as well as the low percentage of women who were educated, averaged about 16%.
Nevertheless, these above assumption might not be exact to the rest of nations. Particularly, despite of the lowest proportion of population growth made up 1.2%, Sri Lanka witnessed its percentage of educated women was lower than both Columbia and Thailand. It is also interesting to note that women in the countries which witnessed a plenty of either civil wars or terrorism such as Afghanistan, Mali, Sudan and Parkistan had less chance to go to school than the others.
Good evening everyone!
Would you mind to give me some advice for my writing task 1? Below are the topic and my answer.
female literacy and population growth in the graph
The graph below show the rate of women's literacy and population growth to selected countries from 1998 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of female literacy and population growth in different Asian countries during the period from 1998 to 2000.
As is shown by the graph, there was a correlation between the women's literacy and the birthrate throughout two years. Thailand and Columbia who experienced the largest proportion of educated women, accounted for 96% and the low level of the population growth, namely under 1.9%. By contrast, the highest birthrate is believed that it was the original root for the bottom level of female literacy in Yemen Arab Rep. and Afghanistan, approximately 4% and 8.5% respectively. In the same way, Mali, Sudan, Pakistan and Dominican Rep underwent the high level of birthrate as well as the low percentage of women who were educated, averaged about 16%.
Nevertheless, these above assumption might not be exact to the rest of nations. Particularly, despite of the lowest proportion of population growth made up 1.2%, Sri Lanka witnessed its percentage of educated women was lower than both Columbia and Thailand. It is also interesting to note that women in the countries which witnessed a plenty of either civil wars or terrorism such as Afghanistan, Mali, Sudan and Parkistan had less chance to go to school than the others.
