Undergraduate / International issues - Personal Statement for Applying to undergraduate course at NUS [7]

Greetings guys, I am new in this forum and I am trying to draft my personal statement for application to NUS. I'm looking for your insight towards my essay, and if I could improve my writing. Any kind of response is kindly appreciated. Thank you very much for your attention.

Here is the prompt: You should also include a personal statement in this section elaborating on your achievements, as well as their relevance to the course of study you have chosen. (2000 characters maximum)

As your statement is limited to only 2000 characters, do present your ideas in a focused and thoughtful manner.

Joining International MUN Competition

During my high school years, I am fortunate to have the privilege of being a representative of my school in the BRIDGE sister school partnership program with the Corinda State High School and given the chance of experiencing what it's like to study abroad. I learned a lot when I was in Australia, about aboriginal cultures, various indigenous wildlife, and also issues that Australians face. It was truly an unforgettable experience. Moreover, I am maintaining communication with my host family. Learning about different kinds of topics has become my daily habit. Growing up in the information age, I watched a lot of YouTube videos about different kinds of international issues such as pollution, poverty, civil wars, conflicts, and the refugee crisis. I even went as far as bringing up those aforementioned issues in my classroom debates. Therefore, when I heard about the existence of a conference for teenagers about the UN from one of my school alumnus, I instantly knew that I had to take the plunge, and so I did. When I first got the chance to dabble in the MUN arena, I had little idea about the inner workings of the UN, even more so about the topic that I will be discussing at the conference. Joining the Asia World MUN III conference has enhanced my skills from writing effective research papers, how to voice my ideas, and building connections with various delegates from different kinds of countries. MUN has changed me so much, from being the average high school student to a delegate actively seeking discussion and solutions for international issues. I always look at how innovative young entrepreneurs were and I went to try building my own games. My main goal is to solve those international issues by creating computer programs and raising awareness in the information age. I am determined to pursue a degree in computer science at NUS, Singapore's flagship and one of the world's top leading universities, using technology to tackle these international issues once and for all.

Thank you very much for taking a look at my essay. I humbly await your responses.