Undergraduate / my funky shoes - COMMON APP ESSAY. thoughts? [7]

Hey!
This is a great common app essay. I love the idea of sandals and how they emulate your beliefs and the exclamation points in the conclusion.

Your descriptions are great, and the only suggestion I would say is to tip this mantra towards what you look forward to in the future. It's taught you a valuable lesson, but how will you take this and apply it further into your life. And also, I'm not familiar with which common app prompt this is, but I personally love it :)

Good luck!

Undergraduate / "I knew that was the right major for me." - Stanford [2]

Hey,
thanks for answering my question.
I think it's a great response to the question but I have 3 main suggestions.
1. the intro is interesting, yet try and connect it with the rest of the paragraph
2. explain more about why you want to do management engineering
3. you say you talked to one of your teachers, who was he/she? be more descriptive in what truly intrigues you about this specific program at Stanford and maybe even how it's better than the one in the Philippines and what you know about it.

hope that helps,
best of luck and happy new year:)