rachc67
Oct 12, 2009
Undergraduate / help make my FSU admission essay more professional and itellectual [6]
I wrote another essay that is differant for FSU, but contains some of what i said up there in one paragraph. Is this essay a better way to go? Let me know ASAP!
The Latin words "Vires, Artes, and Mores" signify moral strength, beauty of the art, and strength of character. In the time I have had to sit down and think about these three values, I have had a chance to examine the values of my own life as well. Seeing how these values relate to who I have become over the past years makes me believe I would make an excellent student at Florida State University.
"Virus" signifies strength in many ways and I believe that my best personal quality is my moral strength. In today's society it is very difficult for people to stay true to their own beliefs and values. People nowadays forget to focus on the important things that will affect the rest of their lives. They tend to only focus on the here and now, and not the future consequences. I have seen many of my friends and classmates get swallowed up in trying to be popular and not be able to stand up for themselves. Being morally strong has allowed me to make genuine friendships with people. Although, I have had to withstand the many pressures of growing up, those tests have made my faith in myself stronger than ever.
Fortunately, for me, I have had the benefit of being exposed to art my whole life. Every summer for about ten years my family and I would take a trip to this small town in New York called Chautauqua. There, we would get to see anything from art stands set up in the street of the main square, to ballet or opera shows, to even Chinese acrobatics. Everyday there was something new and exciting to do or see, there was no such thing as a dull moment. Seeing all the diversity of arts helped me broaden my understanding and thinking. In the summer of 2008 my family and I had the opportunity to go to Italy for two weeks. We went to quite a few different cities including Rome, Venice, and Florence. Here I was able to experience other culture's art and see how art there differentiated from here in America. Seeing things such as the Pantheon, the Vatican, the statue of David, and the murano glass industry really changed my life and put it in a whole new perspective. Honestly, it was the most incredible experience of my entire life and has inspired me to take up drawing and sketching.
To me, character is the most important thing about a person. The past four years of high school have really helped shape me into a better person. Everything I have gone through has led me to realize that instead of using your energy on being negative and pessimistic, that you should always try to be happy and thankful for what you have. The motto I like to live by is what H. Jackson Brown once said: "Good character is more to be praised than outstanding talent. Most talents are, to some extent, a gift. Good character, by contrast, is not given to us. We have to build it, piece by piece - by thought, choice, courage, and determination."
Whether it is my past, my present, or my future, these words greatly echo who I am as a person. I am a strong, artistic, and intelligent young woman who can and will make a positive impact not only in college, but also in life.
I wrote another essay that is differant for FSU, but contains some of what i said up there in one paragraph. Is this essay a better way to go? Let me know ASAP!
The Latin words "Vires, Artes, and Mores" signify moral strength, beauty of the art, and strength of character. In the time I have had to sit down and think about these three values, I have had a chance to examine the values of my own life as well. Seeing how these values relate to who I have become over the past years makes me believe I would make an excellent student at Florida State University.
"Virus" signifies strength in many ways and I believe that my best personal quality is my moral strength. In today's society it is very difficult for people to stay true to their own beliefs and values. People nowadays forget to focus on the important things that will affect the rest of their lives. They tend to only focus on the here and now, and not the future consequences. I have seen many of my friends and classmates get swallowed up in trying to be popular and not be able to stand up for themselves. Being morally strong has allowed me to make genuine friendships with people. Although, I have had to withstand the many pressures of growing up, those tests have made my faith in myself stronger than ever.
Fortunately, for me, I have had the benefit of being exposed to art my whole life. Every summer for about ten years my family and I would take a trip to this small town in New York called Chautauqua. There, we would get to see anything from art stands set up in the street of the main square, to ballet or opera shows, to even Chinese acrobatics. Everyday there was something new and exciting to do or see, there was no such thing as a dull moment. Seeing all the diversity of arts helped me broaden my understanding and thinking. In the summer of 2008 my family and I had the opportunity to go to Italy for two weeks. We went to quite a few different cities including Rome, Venice, and Florence. Here I was able to experience other culture's art and see how art there differentiated from here in America. Seeing things such as the Pantheon, the Vatican, the statue of David, and the murano glass industry really changed my life and put it in a whole new perspective. Honestly, it was the most incredible experience of my entire life and has inspired me to take up drawing and sketching.
To me, character is the most important thing about a person. The past four years of high school have really helped shape me into a better person. Everything I have gone through has led me to realize that instead of using your energy on being negative and pessimistic, that you should always try to be happy and thankful for what you have. The motto I like to live by is what H. Jackson Brown once said: "Good character is more to be praised than outstanding talent. Most talents are, to some extent, a gift. Good character, by contrast, is not given to us. We have to build it, piece by piece - by thought, choice, courage, and determination."
Whether it is my past, my present, or my future, these words greatly echo who I am as a person. I am a strong, artistic, and intelligent young woman who can and will make a positive impact not only in college, but also in life.