Beccalou
Oct 12, 2009
Undergraduate / making my college essay sing as loudly and well as I can. [4]
Thanks for the input. It was very helpful. Any thoughts from anyone on how to punch it up a little more would be apprieciated.
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My initial reaction to the essay question was to begin writing about how my passion for music and singing was the driving force in my life. But as I collected my thoughts on the question I realized that I had jumped to the wrong conclusion. Although my life has been consumed by Artes, without Vires to keep me physically strong and Mores keep me morally strong, I would not be able to maintain the balance necessary to become a self-sufficient, compassionate adult. I could be the most talented singer FSU has ever seen but if I do not possess the traits embodied in FSU's philosophy, I will not achieve my full potential.
From the time I was an infant, my parents recognized my intense attraction to music. Before I could walk, my attention could be captured by a catchy jingle on the television or radio. In Kindergarten, I was the student who the teachers put in the front row at the microphone because I could carry a tune and remember the words to the songs in the school play. By the time I was 7 years old, I was entertaining and astounding adult audiences singing karaoke songs. One of my most exhilarating experiences was when I was eight years old and performed the National Anthem at a Florida Marlin's baseball game. As I stood there listening to the roaring applause, I knew that I had found my calling. From that point until now, I have pursued opportunities to perform and share my gift.
I have found voice performance to be an ambitious master that teaches many lessons. It has taught me humility and patience. It has shown me the value of study and practice. It has taught me effective time management and self discipline, in addition to perseverance and leadership. I have also learned the painful lessons that sometimes life is not fair and that politics exist in all arenas.
My parents always assured me that disappointment was an opportunity to grow into a stronger person. If I did not get the part I tried out for, they would encourage me to take the smaller part and make it "memorable." They gave me their unconditional love and encouragement and urged me to never give up, and always take a chance. They were always proud of me and showed up to every performance.
In addition to vocally performing in a wide variety of choral and drama groups, I have begun to take the opportunity to teach vocal techniques to others not only to improve their musical craft but to refine my own.
The three concepts Vires, Artes, and Mores go hand-in-hand with each other and together, create the ideal well-rounded human being. I believe that my determination and dedication in the arts, as well as in academics, represent Florida State's motto. I know that studying at a top-rated, rigorous music program such as yours will motivate me to become a more independent person with a much stronger character.
Thanks for the input. It was very helpful. Any thoughts from anyone on how to punch it up a little more would be apprieciated.
Here is the next round...
My initial reaction to the essay question was to begin writing about how my passion for music and singing was the driving force in my life. But as I collected my thoughts on the question I realized that I had jumped to the wrong conclusion. Although my life has been consumed by Artes, without Vires to keep me physically strong and Mores keep me morally strong, I would not be able to maintain the balance necessary to become a self-sufficient, compassionate adult. I could be the most talented singer FSU has ever seen but if I do not possess the traits embodied in FSU's philosophy, I will not achieve my full potential.
From the time I was an infant, my parents recognized my intense attraction to music. Before I could walk, my attention could be captured by a catchy jingle on the television or radio. In Kindergarten, I was the student who the teachers put in the front row at the microphone because I could carry a tune and remember the words to the songs in the school play. By the time I was 7 years old, I was entertaining and astounding adult audiences singing karaoke songs. One of my most exhilarating experiences was when I was eight years old and performed the National Anthem at a Florida Marlin's baseball game. As I stood there listening to the roaring applause, I knew that I had found my calling. From that point until now, I have pursued opportunities to perform and share my gift.
I have found voice performance to be an ambitious master that teaches many lessons. It has taught me humility and patience. It has shown me the value of study and practice. It has taught me effective time management and self discipline, in addition to perseverance and leadership. I have also learned the painful lessons that sometimes life is not fair and that politics exist in all arenas.
My parents always assured me that disappointment was an opportunity to grow into a stronger person. If I did not get the part I tried out for, they would encourage me to take the smaller part and make it "memorable." They gave me their unconditional love and encouragement and urged me to never give up, and always take a chance. They were always proud of me and showed up to every performance.
In addition to vocally performing in a wide variety of choral and drama groups, I have begun to take the opportunity to teach vocal techniques to others not only to improve their musical craft but to refine my own.
The three concepts Vires, Artes, and Mores go hand-in-hand with each other and together, create the ideal well-rounded human being. I believe that my determination and dedication in the arts, as well as in academics, represent Florida State's motto. I know that studying at a top-rated, rigorous music program such as yours will motivate me to become a more independent person with a much stronger character.