minhngoc25a
Apr 9, 2020
Writing Feedback / The idea of imposing university education at no charge from a government for society growth [4]
This is my own opinion only, and it could be incorrect.
(1) "Could" →"Can" (2nd sentence, 2nd paragraph) because you're writing in present tense mainly.
(2) Remove "The" (same sentence as (1)) because of the plural noun.
(3) "A intelligent" →"Intelligent" (final sentence of the final paragraph) because you already written "a" before "happy", it is excessive here.
This is my own opinion only, and it could be incorrect.
(1) "Could" →"Can" (2nd sentence, 2nd paragraph) because you're writing in present tense mainly.
(2) Remove "The" (same sentence as (1)) because of the plural noun.
(3) "A intelligent" →"Intelligent" (final sentence of the final paragraph) because you already written "a" before "happy", it is excessive here.
