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Sally 205

Jun 15, 2020

Writing Feedback / Parents, Children, How to be good members of society, School [6]

On the other hand. ] , I believe that family is the first school .....
I think that you should check your work carefully as this tiny mistake can make you regret.

Sally 205

Jun 15, 2020

Writing Feedback / [IELTS]Some people think success is the best measure of intelligence [5]

I think you should use the words that you have understood them correctly so that you can prevent your sentences from obscure meaning.

Sally 205

May 15, 2020

Writing Feedback / The graph illustrates the fish, lamb, beef and chicken consumptions in an European country [3]

Cambridge English IELTS 7. Test 2. Task 1.

The graph illustrates the fish, lamb, beef and chicken consumptions in an European country from 1979 to 2004.
There were a significant rise in the amount of chicken consumed and a steep decrease in beef and lamb consumptions. Meanwhile, the consumption of fish was stable during that time.

In 1979, beef was the most popular meat in this country. Between 1980 and 1986, the amount of beef consumed moderately fluctuated then rapidly declined: 220 grams and 100 grams per person per week respectively: 120 grams gone down.

At the beginning of the period, the chicken and lamp consumptions were quite the same : approximately 150 grams per person per week but these two features come to two different ways. The chicken consumption sharply went up to 250 grams for a person in a week: 100 grams per person per week rise. By comparison, the amount of lamb eaten remarkably dropped by a similar amount.

The amount of fish consumed had a slight unsteadiness with an inconsiderable slump over the 25 - year - period.

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