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Oct 12, 2009
Undergraduate / "The real man smiles in trouble..." college transfer essay (want to go to UMASS) [3]
-help me with grammar,
and tell me how it is over all for common app transfer essay.
thank you so much
My current college is a good academic institution but it is not the best match for me. My major is Biology in Bunker Hill community college, but I always felt passionate about computer. So now I made a strong decision to study in Computer and information systems; Therefore, I need to study at a place that would help me to reach my goal.
I am looking for a university that will challenge me beyond my limits, and give me the best tools to be prepares for my future. I want to be part of an academic intuition where learning does not stop at the classroom. I believe that UMASS will not only provide me the academic strength, but also provides a student body as passionate. Learning from my friend, I admire how UMASS Boston is a place where diversity is celebrated from every culture. I would love to be part of a community where I can have conversations that go far beyond modern technology.
I want to go to UMASS more than any other school since I want to live in Boston. After doing some research, I know by heart that UMASS Boston will satisfy my search for the best education and opportunities in the field. Most important; UMASS offers the Bachelors of Computer and information degree that I want the most out of it. My goal is not just to get a degree in but also want to meet people from around the world. I want to keep my imagination working all the time. I cannot imagine any other career that would fulfill my needs as Computer and information does, and I cannot think of any other schools apart from UMASS that would help me to archive my goal. I am passionate, willing and eager to learn and research. I want to use every opportunity you give me, and maximize it to its greatest potential. I will work, push, and do what I have to do to climb my way to the top. As Thomas Paine once said, "The real man smiles in trouble, gathers strength from distress, and grows brave by reflection."
-help me with grammar,
and tell me how it is over all for common app transfer essay.
thank you so much
My current college is a good academic institution but it is not the best match for me. My major is Biology in Bunker Hill community college, but I always felt passionate about computer. So now I made a strong decision to study in Computer and information systems; Therefore, I need to study at a place that would help me to reach my goal.
I am looking for a university that will challenge me beyond my limits, and give me the best tools to be prepares for my future. I want to be part of an academic intuition where learning does not stop at the classroom. I believe that UMASS will not only provide me the academic strength, but also provides a student body as passionate. Learning from my friend, I admire how UMASS Boston is a place where diversity is celebrated from every culture. I would love to be part of a community where I can have conversations that go far beyond modern technology.
I want to go to UMASS more than any other school since I want to live in Boston. After doing some research, I know by heart that UMASS Boston will satisfy my search for the best education and opportunities in the field. Most important; UMASS offers the Bachelors of Computer and information degree that I want the most out of it. My goal is not just to get a degree in but also want to meet people from around the world. I want to keep my imagination working all the time. I cannot imagine any other career that would fulfill my needs as Computer and information does, and I cannot think of any other schools apart from UMASS that would help me to archive my goal. I am passionate, willing and eager to learn and research. I want to use every opportunity you give me, and maximize it to its greatest potential. I will work, push, and do what I have to do to climb my way to the top. As Thomas Paine once said, "The real man smiles in trouble, gathers strength from distress, and grows brave by reflection."
