Posts by Mariam892
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Undergraduate /
"Pacing and pacing" - Fsu Admission Essay Vires [3]
You make the change sound so sudden, without explanation. You say you became "quiet" and "
to yourself" but you should focus on
how that change happened. Otherwise, your essay will sound fake and forced.
Undergraduate /
Undergrade Advice (contribute to diversity + meaningful event) [2]
Be honest, but do it in a tactful way. never put anything that will detract from the admissions office perspective's of you, unless you're showing how you were before a change occurred. Therefore, if humorous is your natural tone, go for it. Just be careful not to get too carried away.
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