Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 2: Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged to control car ownership [3]

Hi! I have some suggestions for you:

"have fewer cars on roads"
"... burning petrol, and thus, to help make our planet less polluted"
"... the air everyone breathes"

Writing Feedback / The use of the internet has brought many problems. [5]

Hi! There are some grammartical errors in your essay :

"...encourage them to participate in extracurricular activities."

"... has a certain effect on people's life"

"...may become the addicted of Internet"

"...spend a long period of time on"

Hope my suggestions useful!