Posts by nana121

nana121

Sep 12, 2020

Writing Feedback / A line graph shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology [3]

the percentage terms of the changing, you forgot of there
i think usage of CD players sounds better than " using of CD player"
you should upload the picture so i can know your writing better.

nana121

Sep 7, 2020

Writing Feedback / WRITING PART 1- NUMBER OF BOOKS READ BY MEN AND WOMEN [3]

@Holt Thank you so much, I am gona write one more sentence for the summary overview. I already mentioned about the mesurement touch in the sentence " Between 2011 to 2013, the number of books read by two genders increased steadily until meeting at 10000 in 2013" in pharagraph 2, do you think that ís enough or i need to write more?

nana121

Sep 7, 2020

Writing Feedback / WRITING PART 1- NUMBER OF BOOKS READ BY MEN AND WOMEN [3]

Hi everyone, I am new to ielts writing, it is really hard skill for me to study by myself. Please help me!!! Thank you in advance.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Here is writing:

The diagram illustrates how many books that male and female readers red at Burnarby Public library between 2011 and 2014. During the period from 2011 to 2013, Man red more books than women, however, the opposite was true from 2013 to 2014.

In 2011, there was more books read by men than women. Men red 5000 books, compared to 3000 books read by women. Between 2011 to 2013, the number of books read by two genders increased steadily until meeting at 10000 in 2013. In the following year, the figure for books read by female readers increased by 4000 to reach 14000. In contrast, the figure for males followed the opposite trend to fall to a low of 8000 in that year.

Thus, over period of 4 years, women started to read more books than theirs beginning and overtook men. On the other hand, the number of books read by men peaked in 2013 and then began to fall.

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