veenajayant
Sep 15, 2020
Writing Feedback / Ielts writing task 2 - Animal extinction - Reasons and Solution [3]
Hi,
Ideas used for this essay are quite good. But remember, IELTS does not mark you on the ideas, they mark you on your language skills. Hence focus on the four points shared below:
1. Task achievement - Your essay should be a minimum of 250 words. What you have written is fine which is just 257. I would suggest you to aim for at least 270-290 words.
2. Coherence and cohesion (structure and flow) - Putting you opinion statement in the intro would be a better idea presentationwise. Also be as clear and direct as possible. Instead of saying several factors write "two main reasons" that provides clarity which is an important element of your essay.
3. Lexical resource (vocabulary and accuracy) - leads to damage towildlife habits this would reduce you marks as you have spelled habitats incorrectly. Always proofread as it will make a huge difference. More importantly, try to use synonms wherever possible with accuracy. The word residents can be written as locals, citizens, people etc. Include linkers such as - Such as, Whereas, While, Although, However, Along with and others.
4. Grammar - Correct use of tenses and a variety of sentence structures are essential. Try to maintain a single tense (depending on essay topics) and add a variety of sentences like simple, compound and complex to your essay. This will help boost your score.
Hi,
Ideas used for this essay are quite good. But remember, IELTS does not mark you on the ideas, they mark you on your language skills. Hence focus on the four points shared below:
1. Task achievement - Your essay should be a minimum of 250 words. What you have written is fine which is just 257. I would suggest you to aim for at least 270-290 words.
2. Coherence and cohesion (structure and flow) - Putting you opinion statement in the intro would be a better idea presentationwise. Also be as clear and direct as possible. Instead of saying several factors write "two main reasons" that provides clarity which is an important element of your essay.
3. Lexical resource (vocabulary and accuracy) - leads to damage towildlife habits this would reduce you marks as you have spelled habitats incorrectly. Always proofread as it will make a huge difference. More importantly, try to use synonms wherever possible with accuracy. The word residents can be written as locals, citizens, people etc. Include linkers such as - Such as, Whereas, While, Although, However, Along with and others.
4. Grammar - Correct use of tenses and a variety of sentence structures are essential. Try to maintain a single tense (depending on essay topics) and add a variety of sentences like simple, compound and complex to your essay. This will help boost your score.
