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Name: Huzaifah Hanum
Joined: Nov 28, 2020
Last Post: Nov 28, 2020
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From: Indonesia
School: Universitas Indonesia

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Huzaifah   
Nov 28, 2020
Scholarship / Motivation letter for Erasmus Mundus Euroculture: Society, Politics and Culture in a Global Context [4]

You write "my goal of becoming involved in European affairs for the benefit of my fellow Filipinos". It is better for you to describe why you have to involved in European affair in next paragraph.

You write "I was not given the scholarship". I suggest you to change with "I have not been awarded any scholarship".

You have a confused sentences here "Being part of ...". You may remake with "Being a part of youth community of the church, I was involved into more international charity and missionary work".

I see that you are obsessed to work in European or related to European affairs. I don't know how much it can help you to take the attention of the Admission Committee.

You write "I intend to research interethnic and interreligious relations within multicultural societies in Europe". Nowadays, Europe has a serious problem with inter-religious and multicultural case, such as islamophobia and anti-immigrant emerging issues. Is it true the path you took in Europe?
Huzaifah   
Nov 28, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 1 which is talk about producing steam [4]

Your essay did not summarize how stream is produced by utilizing a gas cooled nuclear reactor. You just described the component of the gas cooled nuclear reactor.

It is better to write it with the sequence of paragraph:
1. how stream is created in heat exchanger; and
2. how hot gas is created from the reactor.

By this way, you essay can fulfill this writing task.
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