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number of graduates in Canada

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007.

The given line graph displays the number of alumni in Canada within 15 years starting from 1992. It can be discerned that the number of female graduates was all-time higher than that of male graduates, and both figures shared an identical growth pattern.

In 1992, there were roughly 100.000 female alumni in Canada. This number steadily increased over 3 years before slowly declining by the same margin for the same amount of time. Starting in 1998, the number of female graduates experienced an upward spiral within the remaining period, reaching up to 150.000 in 2007, a roughly 50% increase compared to the original amount.

The number of male graduates at the beginning of the period was 30% lower compared to the female's. The former's growth pattern is quite similar to the latter, whereas it fluctuated for 9 years before growing stably, resulting in an increase of roughly 25.000 at the end of the period.

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