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Ris

Apr 16, 2021

Scholarship / Information Systems - supporting statement for AAS about choose proposed course and institution [4]

and I feel RMIT is the right campus for me, and I hope

Halo Juna, In my opinion, this sentences sounds doubtful, maybe you can change with a sentence that is optimistic.

Ris

Apr 16, 2021

Scholarship / Master of Social Work and Psychology - AAS Supporting Statement [2]

Supporting Statement

Hello, everyone. I am Risma Inayah from Indonesia. I need your help to review my essay. I really appreciate your comments and feedback. Thank you. Have a nice day.

Having a degree in psychology and experience volunteering at Women Crisis Centre has helped me realise that Gender-Based Violence (GBV) in women and children's cases is still lacking awareness and remains taboo amongst Indonesian society. The negative impacts of the COVID-19 pandemic in socioeconomics welfare and obligation to social isolation have also increased GBV's cases. Therefore, comprehensive efforts are needed to overcome this issue, for example by initiating community empowerment. Overcoming GBV issues align with the Sustainable Development Goals (SDGs) 5: achieve gender equality and empower all women and girls; thus, they can live free of violence and empower themselves, contributing to sustainable development. However, achieving this purpose requires sufficient knowledge and skills, which can be sped up through pursuing a Master's degree in Social Work.

Monash University (MU) comes as my first preference because it offers a Master of Social Work armed with electives subject that concentrates on GBV's issues, such as Family Violence, Social Work Practice, and Recovery Trauma. These subjects meet my future goals to overcome the GBV's issues. Moreover, the other subjects, i.e., Research for social work practice and Assessment and Intervention: Working with Communities subject, will allow me to obtain strong problem-solving, writing, and systematic thinking skills in dealing with GBV's issues. Finally, as a world-leading education system (ranked 55th on QS world-rankings 2021), MU provides a comprehensive learning system that will enhance my ability as a social worker.

My second preference is the Master of Social Work (Qualifying) at the University of Sydney. This course also offers subjects that I need, such as Violence Against Women, Working with Communities, Social Policy Frameworks, and Social Research. I believe that these subjects, along with the education facilities, will shape me as a great contributor in preventing GBV's cases in Indonesia.

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