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Name: Nam Phuong
Joined: Sep 2, 2021
Last Post: Sep 11, 2021
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From: Viet Nam
School: Chuyen Nguyen Trai

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Anthracene   
Sep 11, 2021
Writing Feedback / BEGINNER-WRITING TASK 1: Recycling process of aluminium cans [5]

I think you could work more by researching model answers for this topic. Note how they use paragraphing (mentioning something again using words with similar meaning), different grammar (don't just use simple sentences! Add varieties to your essay)
Anthracene   
Sep 11, 2021
Essays / Help with common app essay idea - my name as a challenge I faced [3]

I could say, your initial idea can be anything at will. Your unusual name might work just as well as other ideas since it is uniquely related to you. But yeah, I'll agree that your name shall be a part of your identity, not really a challenge.

The main point is, how could you describe your mindset, personality, or passion toward the university with that? Is there another relating story, that conveniently conveys yourself as well? For example, did you turn that inconvenience into a strong point? Remember, the university wants to know more about you as a person, so bless them with that through your story.

Hope this helps,
Anthracene   
Sep 4, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: Public Transport, convenient metro [5]

Thank you guys so much for the suggestions! I've missed that!
At first, I thought lightly of the Task Achievements part, so I didn't anticipate this kind of flaw.

All in all, my opinion needs to be clarified right away in the introduction and conclusion, as the discussion topic is "Do you agree or disagree about <thesis>?" Regarding Task Achievements, proving my points only comes after clearly stating my thesis. Do you think in what else aspects can my essay be improved?
Anthracene   
Sep 2, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: Public Transport, convenient metro [5]

Topic:
Public transportation is a great way to travel, particularly within a metropolis. The metro is the most convenient way to get around a city.
Do you agree or disagree?


The worldwide introduction of metro systems has revolutionized the way of traveling in densely populated cities. Henceforth, urban areas residents have voiced agreements as they recognize it as the most favorable means for public mobility. The convenience of underground rails could be proven via two main aspects, which this essay would discuss.

Possibly the most worth-mentioning factor contributing to metro system effectiveness is their affordable cost, especially for inhabitants of lower classes. To illustrate, a significant fraction of underground railway passengers are economic migrants, whose income is hardly sufficient for private vehicles, and government subsidies could grant them better chances to travel. Additionally, underground railway systems' requirements for annual maintenance and staff costs are only a fraction compared to that of other public means of transport. For instance, taxis operation demands enormous human resources for coordination and customer service, which accumulates to augment the final fee.

Another property of metro systems that further enhance city travelers' experience is their time efficiency compared to conventional methods. One reason is that railway's schedules remain active throughout the day, thereby becoming tailor-made for the fast-paced lifestyles required for urban citizens. Furthermore, subway passengers are blessed with a complete absence of congestion, as the nonexistence of obstruction assists bullet trains to go at full throttle. As a result, time wasted on traffic jams and the frustration thereof can be obliterated, thus increase the workforce's productivity.

In conclusion, this essay has advocated the practicality of subway stations in the urban environment based on the mentioned arguments.
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