Writing Feedback / IELTS 1 - The expenditure on consumed goods. The data was collected in France and the UK in 2010 [6]

@Dason
I think you should give more concentration in structuring your essay

Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 2 - should phones be forbidden for youngsters during the school time? [4]

@xuming
In the opinion Essays, you have to provide a conclusive statement. Therefore, I would recommend shortening your Body paragraphs and work more on your Conclusion