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Dec 24, 2021
Undergraduate / Why engineering? My application to the University of Waterloo (Admission Information Form) [5]
Yes, as Holt mentioned above, your entire passage is just a flashback. Although it does bring some insight behind your reason in applying for biomedical engineering, you should summarize the reason into one or two sentences instead. In your case that an event is your source of inspiration, be sure to emphasize on what you learned from the event.
You should focus on your goals (be specific) and how Waterloo can aid you in the process. For example, you can list a specific course you are interested in taking, a specific professor you want to learn from, certain clubs you want to join etc. Show Waterloo that you did research on their program. Ensure your reasons are specific to Waterloo and not so generic that they can be applied to any other biomedical engineering program.
Yes, as Holt mentioned above, your entire passage is just a flashback. Although it does bring some insight behind your reason in applying for biomedical engineering, you should summarize the reason into one or two sentences instead. In your case that an event is your source of inspiration, be sure to emphasize on what you learned from the event.
You should focus on your goals (be specific) and how Waterloo can aid you in the process. For example, you can list a specific course you are interested in taking, a specific professor you want to learn from, certain clubs you want to join etc. Show Waterloo that you did research on their program. Ensure your reasons are specific to Waterloo and not so generic that they can be applied to any other biomedical engineering program.