teresagvl
Nov 1, 2009
Essays / Applying for the University of Miami... My essay is over the word limit--- what do I do? [8]
If I get it down to around 520, is it safe to submit?
If I get it down to around 520, is it safe to submit?
teresagvl
Nov 1, 2009
Essays / Applying for the University of Miami... My essay is over the word limit--- what do I do? [8]
I am applying for the University of Miami, and the personal essay section asks for a 300-400 word essay. However, mine is 590 words. I really can't cut anything out without losing significance, or worse, losing sense, and so I am lost on what to do. The submit box does not have a character limit, and so it fits in there. Should I go ahead and submit, or what?
I am applying for the University of Miami, and the personal essay section asks for a 300-400 word essay. However, mine is 590 words. I really can't cut anything out without losing significance, or worse, losing sense, and so I am lost on what to do. The submit box does not have a character limit, and so it fits in there. Should I go ahead and submit, or what?
teresagvl
Oct 31, 2009
Undergraduate / "I will not conform" - UF essay [4]
I love this essay, its message is great, and the example is admirable.
I agree with a few things the poster above said. You should include whether you ended up taking your AP tests, and if you passed them, etc. to reinforce your last paragraph. I disagree, however, with the whole 'failing lung is a pretty good excuse not to take a test'. I mean, it is indeed a good excuse, but that's the whole point of your essay- good excuses don't amount to success.
You could fix some grammatical errors, and some sentences are a bit awkward, but the overall message, which I would like to think is the most important thing, is great, I completely agree with your points.
Why was the hospital visit humorous at first?
however <-- I would suggest replacing or erasing this word, as it sounds awkward to me , I can attain my goals by not cultivating boundaries and edges of conformity around what I can accomplish.
I love this essay, its message is great, and the example is admirable.
I agree with a few things the poster above said. You should include whether you ended up taking your AP tests, and if you passed them, etc. to reinforce your last paragraph. I disagree, however, with the whole 'failing lung is a pretty good excuse not to take a test'. I mean, it is indeed a good excuse, but that's the whole point of your essay- good excuses don't amount to success.
You could fix some grammatical errors, and some sentences are a bit awkward, but the overall message, which I would like to think is the most important thing, is great, I completely agree with your points.
Why was the hospital visit humorous at first?
however <-- I would suggest replacing or erasing this word, as it sounds awkward to me , I can attain my goals by not cultivating boundaries and edges of conformity around what I can accomplish.
teresagvl
Oct 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Rice "Why this college" motivation essay [3]
Overall, your essay is very nicely written, but I feel it lacks personal input. Though you are very specific in providing us with positive attributes of the college, there is nothing personal about what you say. What makes you, as an individual, appreciate the college? What personal traits would make you especially want to join that college, out of all the others?
Also, I noticed one grammatical error.
blubunny5"Furthermore the department also (furthermore means same thing, omit this word) has many interdisciplinary research programs that allow students to participate."
Overall, your essay is very nicely written, but I feel it lacks personal input. Though you are very specific in providing us with positive attributes of the college, there is nothing personal about what you say. What makes you, as an individual, appreciate the college? What personal traits would make you especially want to join that college, out of all the others?
Also, I noticed one grammatical error.
blubunny5"Furthermore the department also (furthermore means same thing, omit this word) has many interdisciplinary research programs that allow students to participate."
teresagvl
Oct 31, 2009
Undergraduate / I want to push the submit button tonight (Stanford) [19]
I read the first three you posted, and though I'm no essay expert, I'm pretty sure these are outstanding in all standards. Very entertaining, engaging, and just overall great.
I found no errors that have yet to be mentioned.
I wish you the best of luck in all your goals.
Teresa
I read the first three you posted, and though I'm no essay expert, I'm pretty sure these are outstanding in all standards. Very entertaining, engaging, and just overall great.
I found no errors that have yet to be mentioned.
I wish you the best of luck in all your goals.
Teresa
