Undergraduate / Personal Statement - Business Administration undergraduate programme at NUS [3]

I'm applying for the Business Administration undergraduate programme at NUS. The personal statement is limited to 2000 characters and this is a draft of mine. I hope to receive feedback from you. Thank you so much!

Personal Statement - Business Administration

"Why does a bowl of pho cost half as much as a cup of bubble tea while it is more nutritious and cooked sophisticatedly?" My cousin asked me when we went to a pho restaurant together around 6 years ago. Being a 12-year-old girl, I was unable to answer and the matter sunk into oblivion. A year later, I sold bubble tea to support a girl with leukaemia, which evoked the question. I realized pho is just a prime example of most domestic products being undervalued, and this is attributable to not only the customer's conditioned assessment but also the seller's business system. In the same year, I had a chance to visit Singapore and was impressed by the unique economic history there. I firmly believe that studying business in the active environment in Singapore, particularly at NUS, would assist me when I hope to exert a certain degree of impact on the development of national products in the home as well as foreign market.

Since then, I have tried to enrich my personal experience by participating in some social activities. Starting from high school, I have been the monitor for 3 years and co-led the trading of the mathematics classes in the school's fair twice. Notably, after the interview and probation, I was admitted to Empower Women Asia, national-scale entrepreneurship aimed at supporting ethnic minority children and women, and popularizing cultural values. As a part of it, I learned more vividly about running a professional business, especially marketing and customer service. Also, I major in mathematics, which I believe would be a solid base for further study in business. I got the 3rd prize in the Provincial Mathematical Olympiad, which is proof of my progress after the disorientation in the first year at high school.

Yet, the more I experience, the more aware I am of the knowledge, skills, and qualities I need to improve. Once at NUS, I will make the best progress, fulfil my original aspiration, contribute my success to my homeland and also, NUS.