Writing Feedback / [Ielts 1] Numbers of young people in four countries using three types of transportation in a year [2]

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The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year.

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The bar chart gives information about the preferences of young people in four distinct countries in using three means of transportation in an unknown year.

In general, it is clear that car is the most popular transport among 4 countries except for France, whereas the lowest figure is seen in those driving motorbike, except for the US.

As can be seen from the chart, the proportion of car in the UK and the US are the same, standing at 60%. In the UK, the proportion of bicycle is 3 times as much as the proportion of motorcycle, while the US has the contrasting figures in these types of vehicle

Another striking point is the percentage of using car in Italy, standing at approximately 20%, taking the first place among 4 countries. In addition to this, the figure for bike in France is the highest while the lowest figure for this kind of transport belongs to Italy and the US, at around 10%.

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Writing Feedback / [Ielts 1] The proportion of school boys, based on two groups of age, who took part in various sports [3]

The percentage of school aged boys in 5 sports in the UK in 2010

The given table illustrates the proportion of school boys, based on two separate groups of age, who took part in various sports including football, basketball, cricket, rugby, and swimming in the UK in the year 2010.

It is evident that the percentage of boys playing football was the highest among the five types of sports in both groups while the lowest figure belonged to swimming.

For the group of age from 6 to 11 years old, the proportion of boys played sports was higher than that in the from-12-to-16 age group. In particular, football surpassed any other sport in the percentage of players, with almost 90%, which nearly doubled the figure for cricket. Besides, basketball players constituted 35% of the group, while the percentages of those participating in rugby and swimming were significantly less, at around 20% each.

Regarding the boy aged from 12 to 16, the proportion of those playing five provided sports was lower. Though football was the most common sport among this boy group, its figure was roughly 10% lower than that among the younger one. In addition, cricket ranked second in the percentage of participants with its figure being virtually a third, followed by the data on basketball and rugby, at 25% and 21% respectively. Finally, only 19% of school boys in this age group chose to engage in swimming.

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