Anh_65
Apr 21, 2024
Writing Feedback / Being dependend in the modern world [3]
Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, public opinion is divided on whether we, as modern citizens, are becoming more or less dependent on others. As far as I am concerned, living in a technologically advanced society, in some way or another, forces us to increasingly depend on each other.
The primary reason why it could be believed that we are having more independence than people in the past is the development of democracy and civil rights. People are now given more freedom to make contributions to building public policies and to make personal decisions. Today's couples, for instance, may freely choose their spouses without receiving approval from their families or relatives. In addition, along with the wide spread of modern lifestyle, people are more likely to place a higher priority on individualism than on collectivism, which means that they tend to be taught to solve their problems by themselves instead of seeking helps from surrounding people.
Nevertheless, I would be in agreement with advocates of the idea that people are developing a deep dependence on each other these days. Firstly, it is the growing complexity of social division of labor that makes individuals more aware of others' important roles in their lives. For example, both parents who have full-time jobs would not pay full attention to their work if there was not the support from babysitters, housekeepers and so on. Secondly, just as ancient squares, social media is viewed as an ideal environment where people can more easily keep in touch and contact with one another than ever before despite geographic and time barriers.
In conclusion, while there are some opposing viewpoints on the issue, I still believe that we are living in a profoundly interdependent world. (282 words)
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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, public opinion is divided on whether we, as modern citizens, are becoming more or less dependent on others. As far as I am concerned, living in a technologically advanced society, in some way or another, forces us to increasingly depend on each other.
The primary reason why it could be believed that we are having more independence than people in the past is the development of democracy and civil rights. People are now given more freedom to make contributions to building public policies and to make personal decisions. Today's couples, for instance, may freely choose their spouses without receiving approval from their families or relatives. In addition, along with the wide spread of modern lifestyle, people are more likely to place a higher priority on individualism than on collectivism, which means that they tend to be taught to solve their problems by themselves instead of seeking helps from surrounding people.
Nevertheless, I would be in agreement with advocates of the idea that people are developing a deep dependence on each other these days. Firstly, it is the growing complexity of social division of labor that makes individuals more aware of others' important roles in their lives. For example, both parents who have full-time jobs would not pay full attention to their work if there was not the support from babysitters, housekeepers and so on. Secondly, just as ancient squares, social media is viewed as an ideal environment where people can more easily keep in touch and contact with one another than ever before despite geographic and time barriers.
In conclusion, while there are some opposing viewpoints on the issue, I still believe that we are living in a profoundly interdependent world. (282 words)
Please give me a feedback for my writing. Wish you all the best.
