Undergraduate / "Salvation" - Prompt #2 of the personal statement essay for UC Applications [4]

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PROMPT: Tell us about an experience that is important to you. What about
this experience makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?

Salvation comes from the most unexpected places, being that I was only 14 my uncle Henrik found his from me. Henrik had never visited the United States before, and as a first-time tourist to the U.S. he was greeted with a bad case of what is known as hypoglycemic shock in the first week of his stay. Lucky as he was at the time, I was aware of the fact that he was a diabetic and his hypoglycemic shock wasn't the same say if I, a non-diabetic was to receive one.

As I recall it was mid-day in September and the house was only to Henrik and myself. He was discussing his past-times and making small-talk when unexpectedly it seemed as though a wave of uneasiness took over the expression on his face. His skin quickly turned pale and his forehead broke out in sweat. He told me the best he could with his broken speech that his sugar was dropping. By the time I realized that his symptoms were that of his diabetes he had already fallen on his side off the couch and onto the coffee table. I was quick to react and fed him some chocolate and hard candy which eventually helped him regain his strength and posture. Little did I know that afternoon was that I saved a life.

What I realized that night was my love for helping others. I understood my dreams of becoming a doctor to be more realistic. It isn't easy to describe how saving a life feels, but I knew from that day on that I wanted to do this for a living. I disregarded the social status, and the money that comes with being a doctor, the true gift knowing you helped someone else carry on when they couldn't. I found my life's bliss that September, and it seemed as though I was destined for this path since before my birth. My entire family on my father's side has had a background in the medical field, each with their own unique story leading them toward their love for the practice, what I now fully understand and experienced on my own.