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Dec 4, 2009
Undergraduate / "living together is an art" - Colorado University admission essay cumpulsory [7]

also CU has a second question
please proof read it for me please
i am exteremly grateful for your kind act

# In brief discuss how your family, school, neighborhood, and background have impacted your educational goals and aspirations.

Belonging to Pakistan, one's life isn't very easy, which directly points at my hardworking parents. Since we are 6 family members and usually have a tight income, it's not so easy to make both ends meet. My dad has always told us how education can lead one to a happy and successful life, and how stale life is without achieving your goal. I, being the eldest among the siblings, am the core of responsibilities and have to look after the family doing their jobs picking and dropping them at their schools and universities and doing the homely chores. It's a hard daily routine but it's a strive to achieve a dream. Being in a state of terrorism it's not very safe going out or living lively and it impacted a lot on my education as the colleges and universities were shut down for about a month due to the terrorist threats. I belong to a family background where everyone supports me for achieving the most in my education and they try to help me in every way possible to accomplish my goal.

Seeing my dad and mum work and take care of me and my family I'm easily compelled to make them proud by studying at CU and being known as one of the brightest students.

This is a boost to my passion when I think how happy and proud my family would be graduating from such a renowned and top ranking University.
alijaffri   
Dec 3, 2009
Undergraduate / "wonders of science and engineering" - Engineering, essay for the Duke University [5]

also i wrote an essay for the duke university
please proof read it as well and tell me about the quality of writing

Duke
If you are applying to the Pratt School of Engineering, please discuss why you want to study engineering and why you would like to study at Duke

From the very beginning curiosity had its way in my life.Though many a times,i was usually carried away by the "wonders of science and engineering",as I liked to call them,but the very first time any of these wonders really attained my attention was on my eighth birthday.My parents gifted me a remote controlled(R.C.)car.What really fascinated me was the wireless interface that operated the car.I was a little genius on my own but nothing really crept in an eight years old mind that solved the mystery of the car to move wirelessly.I believed that the only person i can count on helping me was my science teacher.It was Friday afternoon and i found it hard to pass the weekend.When i met him i placed my query in front of him and asked him to describe me the real phenomena behind this.He simply said "transmitters in the remote send radio waves or electromagnetic frequencies to an RC car. The operator moves the controls on his remote control and the transmitter connects to the car via the radio carrier wave.These in turn drives the motor and bring the car in motion".That was too much for a third grade kid.I was unable to make heads or tails of what i had just heard and e back home disappointed. .My father,who had physics upto his college level, explained to me that it is the working of all waves and stuff that carry whatever i do on the remote to the car and in turn the car responds to them by way of motion.

That kept me satisfied for sometime but one thing really pinched me,the words of an authority really amount to some critical reasoning and it would be my bad luck not to explore its meaning to its extent.A curiosity so evoked in me instilled the habit to explore and conclude the facts on my own.I used my father's membership to a local library and read every book that had anything to do with science and technology stuff. Only then I came across a book that quenched my thirst. The book was on the wireless technology and discussed its applications in household appliances. The book stated that when a remote control tuned to the frequency of the car is operated, wireless signals are generated by the remote and received by the car. The car in turn converts those electrical signals into electronical commands that are directed to the electric dc motor and the car makes a move. Though i figured that whatever my teacher and my father told me about wireless circuitry was in one way or the other interrelated, it was actually my research on that particular point that really helped me understand the phenomena to its full extent.

It was an event that really changed the method of my approach, the way I see the world; the way i relate facts. Infact I was a curious about how everyday appliances work. Especially the way and working of television enthralled me by its ingenious design frame and remarkable functionality. I remember having researched the ways an electron gun really works for a pretty long period of time and eventually noticed that it was a part of my academic coursework (that carried off the burden for quite a period!!!).Thus all the hard work didn't went in vane and i learnt loads of new stuff in due course. My parents easily realized my thirst for knowledge and subscribed a couple of science and tech magazines Popular Science, It Now and Computing are among them. In addition i was given the facility of surfing the internet to explore further and beyond my topic of interest.

As i grew so did my curiosity about the miracles of technology. The way i see it that technology is a never ending process, active proof that society can only improve over an era. With the time it is bound to increase and so will be my thirst to know the reason behind the working of every mechanism. With university's competitive atmosphere, hardworking students, devoted faculty and strong programs in Electrical, Mechanical, Civil, Biomedical and Aerospace engineering will allow me to make the best of my four years at college. What really appealed to me was the academic and research opportunities readily available on campus. For me Duke University is an opportunity to realize truths about the world. I see Duke University as a chance to expand the horizons of my thought, to think about the world as a bigger place, to analyze its problems in a logical way and accept the life as an opportunity to understand the world around us.
alijaffri   
Dec 1, 2009
Undergraduate / "living together is an art" - Colorado University admission essay cumpulsory [7]

hulllo
my name is ali and i m applying to CU at boulder .i have written their essay and it would be so kind of you guys to rpoof read it for me and let me know about any room for correctoins or additional information.

thanks
here is the question and beneath it the answer.also the answer is restricted to 500 words

The University of Colorado at Boulder's Flagship 2030 strategic plan promotes exceptional teaching, research, scholarship, creative works, and service distinguishing us as a premier university. We strive to foster a diverse and inclusive community for all that engages each member in opportunities for academic excellence, leadership, and a deeper understanding of the world in which we live.

Given the statement above, how do you think you could enrich our diverse and inclusive community and what are your hopes for your college experience?

William Pickens' "living together is an art" perfectly mirrors my way of living and thinking, irrespective of a community's race, status and color, plus I crave for a change, and living within a multicultural community will be a lifetime experience thus making Colorado University the best choice for me.

First of all CU's assorted community really ...

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