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tzeng91

Dec 5, 2009

Undergraduate / Amherst common app supplement essay, need help revising it! [6]

the prompt is

In addition to the essay you are asked to write as part of the Common Application, Amherst requires a second essay (250-500 words). We do not offer interviews as part of the application process at Amherst. However, your essays provide you with an opportunity to speak to us. Please keep this in mind when responding to one of the following quotations. It is not necessary to research, read, or refer to the text from which these quotations are taken; we are looking for original, personal responses to these short excerpts. Remember that your essay should be personal in nature and not simply an argumentative essay.

''Difficulty need not foreshadow despair or defeat. Rather achievement can be all the more satisfying because of obstacles surmounted.''
Attributed to William Hastie, Amherst Class of 1925, first African-American to serve as a judge for the United States Court of Appeals

i dont have any other ideas on writing this promt. that y it is so vague in a sense i guess

tzeng91

Dec 3, 2009

Undergraduate / Amherst common app supplement essay, need help revising it! [6]

Life is full of difficulties and just approaching it, is consider an
achievement. In addition, the achievement will be more satisfying
because of the difficulties encounter through the process. In high
school, getting good grades were the top priority for my parents,
however, it calls for so much work.

I was in honors classes and AP classes throughout the four years,
but it was very difficult to keep my grades above average. Hence, the
high expectations from both of my parents caused me stress and
pressure that were immeasurable. I went through many sleepless nights,
disappointments, obstacles, but, at the end I was able to get through
high school by the support from my parents, friends and teachers.
Thus, I tried to be active in and out of school to keep me one hundred
percent sociable. I was molded by the happiness and the obstacles that
I went through to get to this point, where opportunities are unlimited.

Right now the difficulty of filling out college applications is
driving my mind wild. The comparison of good and bad colleges, the
college my parents want me to go to, and the college I want to go with
my friends are just some of the problems. However, I also had to
consider my reach schools and safety schools.

My college counselor told me just to get everything together and the
rest is just about organizing the information together. Yet, I still
feel unease about the quality of my college essay after three
conferences with my English teacher. However, the difficulty of the
college application does not foreshadow my despair because I know the
college application is a process every high school seniors go through
in their life and our hopes are high. I believed by doing my best in
writing the college essay, SAT, SAT subject test, and the last year of
high school I will get into a college of my choice. Hence, after the
acceptance letter I will feel more proud of myself and the
achievements because of the difficulty of the process. In addition,
difficulties bring us hope and the best of us out.