Writing Feedback / essay of Umich: cultural, intellectual and social differences [8]

I can't think of any closing sentence so please tell me what you think would make a good conclusion. And all advice is welcomed :)

Prompt: Share an experience through which you have gained respect for intellectual, social, or cultural differences. Comment on how your personal experiences and achievements would contribute to the diversity of the University of Michigan.

To be born in China helps me gain a good understanding of diversity. Not only the lifestyles across the country are largely different, but the country consists of 56 distinctive ethnic groups. The traditional religion in China is Buddhism while Christians account for a big number of populations and every ethnic has its own belief, like Islamism. There is a Jami near where I live. Although mandarin is the official language, many people are accustomed to speak their local languages. Living in a country where I can be exposed to many different cultures allows me to have concepts, comprehensions of different things and adapt to new culture easily.

I had a great opportunity to participate in Model UN Conference in 2007 where I met delegates from around the world. On the conference we represented different countries discussing current affairs and global concerns and looked for resolutions standing for mutual interests. Representing other countries other than our original ones required us to put our own cultures and customs aside to acquaint ourselves with the cultures of the countries we were on behalf of. During the discussion we encountered intellectual, cultural and individual differences and, however, we reached resolutions that were good for all or most countries. From this activity I learned how to share my opinion with people who have dissimilar backgrounds and take in concepts that are opposite to mine.