szphoebe
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Thoughtful consultant system, atmosphere, BROWN SUPPLEMENT ---- WHY ESSAY [6]
thank you so much````you've been very helpful``
thank you so much````you've been very helpful``
szphoebe
Dec 24, 2009
Undergraduate / Thoughtful consultant system, atmosphere, BROWN SUPPLEMENT ---- WHY ESSAY [6]
（It's my second version, please give me more advices. and do you think that i should shorten my conversation more, or i can just delete it by changing my past fondness to Brown. And do i need to mention more specific details of Brown's advantages? And which verb or ADJ can i change? Thank you soooooo much~~）
（It's my second version, please give me more advices. and do you think that i should shorten my conversation more, or i can just delete it by changing my past fondness to Brown. And do i need to mention more specific details of Brown's advantages? And which verb or ADJ can i change? Thank you soooooo much~~）
szphoebe
Dec 23, 2009
Undergraduate / Thoughtful consultant system, atmosphere, BROWN SUPPLEMENT ---- WHY ESSAY [6]
HELP~~~~~This is my short essay of Brown. And i love BROWN SOOOOOOO MUCH.
PLEASE HELP ME TO POINT OUT SOME LACKNESS And SOME gramma mistakes. THANK YOU. because the deadline is coming soon.
"please tell us more about your interest in brown:why does you BROWN as a appeal to you as a college option? who or what has influenced your decision to apply"
One day, I met one of my friends on the street, also preparing to get into a university.
When she referred to my applying college, I answered awkwardly by saying:" my test score was not very satisfying, so I am going to apply Boston College. "
"Why? I mean, you really like it? And how about Brown, your dream school, the one you always refer since grade 9th.
"Brown, ya, but I don't think I can ``"
She interrupted me:" So what? Choosing your favorite university is the key step in your life, no matter what! Or you will regret it!"
Her words just lingered in my mind. The more I pondered, the more I felt I was wrong. I have a right and obligation to pursue my dream. It reminds me of the time when I decided to go abroad. At that time, I had a great eagerness to research universities. Among those various universities, I found Brown. When I entered its web site, I was attracted by its badge. It was just like a bear hided behind a shield which was full of books, when I met it at the first sight. (After several months, I figured out that was not a bear. In actuality it was a sun, some books, and a cross representing that students pursued knowledge with gorgeous sun.) I fell in love with it. I desperately want to know more in Brown. The more I read students' review of Brown, the more I loved this school. As the only one universities accepting students without any religious discrimination at that time, it already showed it's unique. Every time Brown had some new projects, it would be suspended. But being a non-quitter, Brown never gave up continuing these projects and finally all succeed. I appreciated the classical beauty of the university hall. I admired the flexible academic principles. I adored its thoughtful consultant system. I worshiped its liberal atmosphere in campus. I wish that I can grow up in Brown where can satisfy my various interests and inspire me to be more creative. I want to prove that I can be responsible for myself in such a liberal place. I am eager to make more friends
by attending those 300 organizations and hundred of study projects.
I don't want to just give up without any trying. I love Brown.
(maximum is 1000 charater,thank you so much.)
HELP~~~~~This is my short essay of Brown. And i love BROWN SOOOOOOO MUCH.
PLEASE HELP ME TO POINT OUT SOME LACKNESS And SOME gramma mistakes. THANK YOU. because the deadline is coming soon.
"please tell us more about your interest in brown:why does you BROWN as a appeal to you as a college option? who or what has influenced your decision to apply"
One day, I met one of my friends on the street, also preparing to get into a university.
When she referred to my applying college, I answered awkwardly by saying:" my test score was not very satisfying, so I am going to apply Boston College. "
"Why? I mean, you really like it? And how about Brown, your dream school, the one you always refer since grade 9th.
"Brown, ya, but I don't think I can ``"
She interrupted me:" So what? Choosing your favorite university is the key step in your life, no matter what! Or you will regret it!"
Her words just lingered in my mind. The more I pondered, the more I felt I was wrong. I have a right and obligation to pursue my dream. It reminds me of the time when I decided to go abroad. At that time, I had a great eagerness to research universities. Among those various universities, I found Brown. When I entered its web site, I was attracted by its badge. It was just like a bear hided behind a shield which was full of books, when I met it at the first sight. (After several months, I figured out that was not a bear. In actuality it was a sun, some books, and a cross representing that students pursued knowledge with gorgeous sun.) I fell in love with it. I desperately want to know more in Brown. The more I read students' review of Brown, the more I loved this school. As the only one universities accepting students without any religious discrimination at that time, it already showed it's unique. Every time Brown had some new projects, it would be suspended. But being a non-quitter, Brown never gave up continuing these projects and finally all succeed. I appreciated the classical beauty of the university hall. I admired the flexible academic principles. I adored its thoughtful consultant system. I worshiped its liberal atmosphere in campus. I wish that I can grow up in Brown where can satisfy my various interests and inspire me to be more creative. I want to prove that I can be responsible for myself in such a liberal place. I am eager to make more friends
by attending those 300 organizations and hundred of study projects.
I don't want to just give up without any trying. I love Brown.
(maximum is 1000 charater,thank you so much.)
