guitarbfour
Dec 26, 2009
Undergraduate / Mac essay-Macalester College supplement about diversity [6]
no, I just didn't see it on the app.
For the first time in my life, I left home alone for a month to learn English in a strange city. - Awkward phrasing
I had intended to improve my English there - you already explain this. Leave it out.
take out the names of the people and possibly the ethnic groups
Have a better last sentence. It's cliche and general right now
I like how you guys all bond over food. The sentence at the beginning is utterly beautiful. Are you applying from abroad? Hope to see you at Mac!
no, I just didn't see it on the app.
For the first time in my life, I left home alone for a month to learn English in a strange city. - Awkward phrasing
I had intended to improve my English there - you already explain this. Leave it out.
take out the names of the people and possibly the ethnic groups
Have a better last sentence. It's cliche and general right now
I like how you guys all bond over food. The sentence at the beginning is utterly beautiful. Are you applying from abroad? Hope to see you at Mac!