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SSYQ   
Jan 13, 2010
Undergraduate / Colgate University short answer, 250 words max. (my multicultural roots) [3]

I think your essay is quite good, so don't worry.
Though it is short, it is clearly structured.

While reading the essay, I saw a person who is greatly americanized but I did not see a close link between you and your family's value. Maybe you can elaborate on WisdomNet for one or two sentences and abridge the first paragragh.

Good luck!
SSYQ   
Jan 2, 2010
Undergraduate / Hamilton book review, My thoughts after reading "the stranger next door" [4]

Thank you Kevin! I'll work on that though I have already submitted the essay.

There is one thing that I am concern about.
Is there a possibility that one read it through but could make no sense of it?
Or one would think I am having trouble giving shape to my ideas in this essay...

For the person who has not read the book, would it be more difficult for them to understand what I am talking abt?
SSYQ   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Vassar Supplement - "Why Vassar?" [6]

Your essay is great.
I am applying for Vassar too, but I do not see any chance for me to be accepted...

Your words are passionate, smooth and interesting.
Your idea is great also.

All in all, if I were the AO of Vassar, I would definitely give you an admission!
SSYQ   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Hamilton book review, My thoughts after reading "the stranger next door" [4]

the book review is also used as the SUP of Wheaton College (MA).
I translated my book review into English to meet the colleges' requirement.
Please mail or attach one example of expository prose that you have written for a school assignment. Attach a photocopy of the original, including a description of the assignment, complete with the teacher's comments and grade. You should submit an analytical essay, a book review or a research paper (short stories, poetry, plays or lab reports are not expository prose).Please tell me what do you think about my book review.

Thanks for reading!

Not until the time I held the book in my hand that I realized the author of the book "The Stranger Next Door" is Amélie Nothomb, a celebrated, successful and very marketable Belgian writer who is still unknown to most Chinese people.

The book garnered rave review in the press. Almost every person who read the novella said that Nothomb's words made him in stitches. Maybe my expectation for the book was too high; I didn't find it very humorous when I was reading it. But it is undeniable that the unique conception, grotesque story and its abstruse philosophy deserve care analysis.

A retired school teacher Emile Hazel (the narrator) and his wife Juliette buy a house in a remote place for the peace and solitude. Into its small idyll comes an odd neighbor Palamedes Bernardin who occurs at precisely four o'clock and imposes himself on the Hazels without saying a word for two hours every day. At first, the Hazels consider Bernardin's reappearance as courtesy visits and feel proud to have a Doctor to be their neighbor. Soon, they find his continuous visits as a nightmare because their ideal life has become an illusion. As they are educated people, they cannot stop the neighbor from disturbing them punctually every day. "If one knocks at your door, you should open it". So the Hazels try to find some way-chattering without stop or keeping silent in the two hours-in order to irritate Bernardin. Mr. Hazel tries everything in vain to dissuade Bernardin's neighborliness and realizes that "when one meets an imbecile, one finds one's rights so limited".

Bernardin is an unpleasant person. He doesn't like to eat, to drink, to take a walk in nature, to listen to others, to read or to appreciate the beauty. He doesn't like anything. The only reason for him to be alive is to torture others. Regrettably, he doesn't drive pleasure from this kind of destruction-"He even has no interest in disturbing me; he does that unavoidably, for it is his duty. He gets no pleasure by doing it. It seems that in his mind, disturbing me is also an awfully boring thing".

Actually, Bernardin is so world-weary that he decides to suicide. He takes great courage to do so but is finally saved by Emile Hazel. Emile says: "It was I who saved you." Bernardin says coldly: "I know." It is only then that Emile realizes he has done something wrong. At last, Emile has to kill Bernardin with his own hands to grant the wish of that odd neighbor.

The novella fills my mind with a myriad of thoughts and ideas. Just like Emile, I "no longer know myself". Civilized people become quite unable to do anything when they meet a creature like Bernardin which has no pleasure of life. It sounds ridiculous, but it does make sense.

The advent of Bernardin makes "us" get into a panic. "We" look discomfiture when "we" and Bernardin(civilization and barbarism) confront each other. "We" cannot be as rude as Bernardin and "we" cannot abandon "our" civilizations and courtesy, for the latter has become almost inherent like skin and breath. "We have been so polite that we have already forgotten that we are polite"- just like "we" won't be aware of "our" skin and breath all the time. "We" should be "as polite as possible" even if "we" are mocking someone.

However, the seemingly powerful civilization which binds people becomes fragile and ineffective before uncivilized people. "My" struggle within the limitation of civilization yardstick is defeated by the silence of Bernardin time after time. "I" begin to reflect on "my" life: "Students respect me and I believe I have a God-given authority, that's why I cherish the illusion that I am the strong. In fact, I am only a civilized person. Everything becomes easy when there is civilization, but when one meets an imbecile, one finds one's rights so limited".

"I" start to look squarely at an unnoticed corner in "my" heart. When "I" finally find a pretext to hurt others, "I" quickly slide toward "villainy"- the villainy relative to the civilization. Outside is the hot zone of the battle between "my civilization" and Bernardin's "barbarism"; inside "my" heart, something unknown by "me" is awakened at the same time.

"I" begin to show an ignoble side: "I" think that the cyst Bernadette, Bernardin's wife who is also a horrible creature, is his weak point. On one hand, "I" say: "It's true, I promise. She is-distinctive, it's alright. We like her very much."-"distinctive" seems especially vitriolic and malicious; "We like her very much" is used to conceal the real opinion "she makes us sick". "We" attack Bernadette with the hypocritical side of civilization: "I cannot help laughing when I call to mind that the devil (Bernadette) was regarded as Chinese porcelain".

However, "we" turn out to be hurt deeply by the hypocrisy of civilization.

The poignant harm, which is ostensibly caused by Bernardin, is actually done by Clair, a woman comes from civilized world who hurts "me" deeply in a civilized way. Clair cuts of the contact between she and her teacher just because she doesn't get an expectative welcome from him and just because she is under the misapprehension that he has become the same person as Bernardin- is it a typical civilized action?

"'You will come back, won't you? Clair, you will come back, right?'" I am almost entreating.
"'Yes, of course, Mr. Hazel.'"-The prevarication that comes from the civilized world.
"The car disappeared in the woods. I know I will never see my student again." Civilization shows its grisly countenance. "I", as a person who knows every detail of the game rules in the civilized world, have been harmed profoundly by the deceptive rules.

The brand "I" manages for the whole life in the civilized world- a venerable and wise professor- is so vulnerable that a reticent and rude person has already knocked it into pieces without punching at once. "I" utter a sigh: "My life is a failure. My life is a failure."

"I" deny my own value so easily.

"Mr. Bernardin's two-month oppression has already damaged something. I don't know what it is, but I painfully feel the damage." What actually are "my" sense of failure and the damage? "I" realize surprisingly that only by being ruder can one overpowers the rude behavior and only by being more uncourteous can one overpowers the uncourteous manner. The civilization "I" embrace throughout my life is actually very vulnerable. "I" lost something unfamiliar but also important.

After the encounter, "I" become crushed little by little. However, it is "my" fault. "No one is the victim of anyone except oneself". Fissures have already existed in "my" body. All Bernardin does is to knock "me" lightly and "I" begin to collapse: Scratch a Russian, and you find a tartar. Civilization just covers up those gruesome things.

"We" are ready to invade in the name of "civilization": "we" ruin Bernardin's plan to suicide and force him to be alive; "we" force an entry into Bernardin's house and take away his wife. "He looked at us, powerlessly and angrily. It seemed that to him, we were extremely aggressive neighbors -his thoughts went too far!" (Ironically, "nobody answered the door. I thundered at the door like a boor- just as same as the way Palamedes knocked at my door in winter".) At last, "we" force him to die. "We" impose "ourselves" to Bernadette two hours a day hereon...

So who is the invader? "We" or Bernardin? Or that intangible thing called civilization?

Nothomb discussed through Emile Hazel about the powerlessness, affectation and violence of civilization. The distortion that civilization impacted on humanity has prevented us from seeing what we were originally like. "I" am fully immerged in the atmosphere of civilization, but Bernardin is being invaded by civilization all the time: Life is life itself; however, people roughly force the life to face the trial by values.

The anguish of Bernardin springs from the values he accepts since his childhood. In the eye of his values, his nature is no doubt distorted. The numerous clocks in his house represent his fretful soul and his trial by himself. His visits to his neighbor express his desire for salvation.

Under the rule of the values people created, animality existence is a sin. The existence makes people suffocated, sick and restless. What's more, it profanes the civilization that people are proud of and the belief they have held for a very long time. So, when Bernardin gives up all the hope and stops to pay his clockwork visits, "I" am still determined to put him to death, for his existence destroys "my" value system completely. Besides, his existence, in "my" eyes, is a stigma.

So far, the story is all about "my" arrogance, "my" soliloquy and "my" allegations. Bernardin says nothing and explains nothing for his behavior, even for his suicidal behavior. Only "I", standing on the cornerstone of so-called civilization, draw a conclusion. However, when the cornerstone becomes unsteady, "I" lose "my" direction thoroughly. Or perhaps, in the abyss of "my" mind, begins a new round of struggle...

Who we are when we abandon the affectation of civilization?
What does the "other self" that is confined by civilization look like? Will we meet a Bernardin in our life to set the "other self" free?

Or, perhaps, we are but another Bernardin.

So, "When the snow melts, where has white gone?"
SSYQ   
Dec 30, 2009
Undergraduate / Vassar Supplement - "Why Vassar?" [6]

I remember that Vassar's SUP is limited to only 500 CHARACTERS but not WORDS.
Or you find some other way to attach a file?
SSYQ   
Dec 26, 2009
Undergraduate / "every man is a piece of the continent" - Trinity supplement essay [2]

This is a supplement essay for trinity College. I haven't come up with a satisfying ending and there are lots of mistakes. Please help me .I need your advice~ Thanks for reading!

Trinity's Integrity Contract articulates our expectations of honesty, personal responsibility, active consideration of others, and respect for our community. What personal "integrity contract" do you employ in your own life?

"No man is an island, entire of itself; every man is a piece of the continent, a part of the main."-John Donne

In an age of individuality, most people, especially young people, focus more on themselves but don't care about others. While I can't deny that individuality is vital to individuals, I believe that as important as a man of character a person wants to be, he is a member of the community first. I am always aware of my role as a member of my community. Active consideration of others is an important and fundamental quality of me, for I know that, my behaviors on others, even seemingly minor ones, may have a great impact on them.

One thing happened in senior two convinced me of the power of consideration of others. As the chief editor of our school's literary journal, I received quite a few contributions every week. One day, a sense of déjŕ vu came over me when I was reading an article contributed by a boy. It was an article about Sichuan Earthquake that happened few months earlier and he contributed to the special column I set for the Earthquake. I suddenly realized that I have read the same article on Phoenix Weekly, a news magazine that is not so popular among high school students. I searched out the magazine in the drawer and found the same article without difficulty. It was apparent that the boy copied that article. I was shocked and felt sorry for him, for I always thought that he was a serious and honest student who loved writing. When I told my close friend about it, she said: "The act of plagiarizing is a serious offense. You should tell his head teacher and he should be severely punished!" I knew clearly how bad a thing he had done and usually the method of dealing with this was to tell his teacher. But I also knew the consequence to do so: he would be severely censured and what he did would be known by his parents and classmates so the boy would be weighed down by his own mistakes in the future, which was not what I wanted to see. He was only a 16-year-old boy and the road of his life was still long. Maybe he was just so eager to have his article published in the journal that he became impatient to success. After all, he was a good boy and I didn't want to give him a traumatic memory. Instead of telling his head teacher, I put his article into an envelope and wrote him some words: "I can't publish this article and I guess you know the reason. Honesty is the best policy. I hope you can understand." I found him and gave the envelope to him after school. He asked: "What's this?" I smiled and said: "Just open it yourself." I went away with no more words. A few days later, I found a letter in my desk saying: "I am grateful of what you did. When I opened the envelope and saw my contribution, I knew everything. I was so afraid. If you tell my teacher, I would be ashamed to face people. Thank you for giving me a chance and I promised this kind of thing would never happen again." Every time I ran into him in school, he gave me a grateful smile. I am still happy for the right choice I made today.

Consideration of others is the Integrity Contract that I employed in my life. Just as the great poet John Donne wrote "no man is an island, entire of itself", I'm part of my community and have responsibility to make it better. Being considerate cultivates not only my mind, but also the relationship between people.
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