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thelittleone   
Dec 30, 2009
Undergraduate / 'Studying philosophy' -Brown Essay - Inspiration [4]

Thanks for your advice, I'm slapping myself right now - I can't believe how insensitive the gun remark is!! My brain's a little muddled from writing/editing too many essays/answers at the moment :( I will definitely have a look at your essays, but I'm sorry if I won't make it by Jan 1 (presuming they're application essays) as I'm a little behind with my own applications!
thelittleone   
Dec 30, 2009
Undergraduate / 'Studying philosophy' -Brown Essay - Inspiration [4]

Hello

I would really appreciate it if you could have a look through this essay!

Tell us about an intellectual experience, project, class, or book that has influenced or inspired you.

Studying Philosophy as part of the IB Diploma has inspired me to deliberate on many seemingly mundane issues that I had never given much thought to previously. In fact, I would sometimes be so bewildered after Philosophy lessons that I would start questioning just about everything around me.

Once, I even caught myself pondering the philosophical importance of a junk mail caption. 'YOUR FUTURE IS IN YOUR HANDS'. I encountered this phrase - spelled out in large red letters ï in a leaflet promoting higher education. At face value, this statement was clearly meant to convey the importance of choosing whether or not to pursue higher education. The underlying insinuation of free will, however, prompted me to reflect further on this issue ï do I really have the freedom to choose my path in life, or is my future pre-determined? Is it really me who is making the choice, or am I a mere instrument of causality?

During my Philosophy studies, I became fascinated with the contrasting views on this subject, as free will is something that most of us naturally take for granted. It comes to us so naturally to believe that what we do is out of free choice, our decisions instinctively feel voluntary, so that it seems nearly impossible to think that our actions - even more so spontaneous ones - are somehow part of a causal chain of events and cannot but take place.

What I mean is, when you reach for the chocolate bar or the packet of chips, you probably do not tend to think to yourself: 'Did I decide that I want to eat this, or was I pre-determined to want it?' Maybe it would not matter to you who or what decided that you should crave something right now ï either way, you just want it. But when you do think about it, what if you are no different from a computer ï simply carrying out tasks, all of which you have been pre-programmed to do? Does this mean that your life is inauthentic and perhaps even meaningless?

For now, I am not reaching for the gun just yet: I am betting everything on the hopeful probability that I am at least partially free. However, having been defined by forces beyond me, it is a matter of heart that this causation should be reciprocal - I want to make the world as much as the world makes me. I have the natural curiosity of a philosopher but through my future studies, I hope to go a step further. For as Marx said, the philosophers have only interpreted the world in various ways; the point is to change it.
thelittleone   
Dec 30, 2009
Undergraduate / CommonApp Short Answer - Orphanage [6]

Thanks for your suggestions!

The only fault of any kind I can find is that the phrase 'disabled people's asylum' is a touch awkward. Perhaps: 'asylum for the disabled'.

You're right, it is quite awkward and I've changed it now :)

I agree RDHFinney. This is an incredibly moving short answer. A small suggestion, if there is any way to add that this wasn't a one time event. The college might like seeing that you stuck with this, even though they might be able to read that in your extra curricular section on the common app. They also like to see leadership, if there is any way to point out a specific activity or thing you initiated yourself.

Hope that helped! Check out my essays if you have time please. :)

I'd love to add the stuff you suggested but sadly, I'm all out of words (150 w limit) and I don't want to cut anything out :( I have included it in the activities section, so hopefully the adcom(s) should be able to piece it together.

Thanks for your input, I will definitely have a look at your essays!
thelittleone   
Dec 30, 2009
Undergraduate / CommonApp Short Answer - Orphanage [6]

Hello! Could you please have a look at my CommonApp Short Answer? The exact prompt is:

In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer)

They never cry. The realization hit me as I sang one of the younger babies to sleep. It was my first time helping at the orphanage and disabled people's asylum, and I was not sure what to expect. Loudness or violence? Maybe. But not the calm silence that prevailed everywhere, even in the babies' ward.

The reason? "Crying never got them anything, so they gave up", said a busy nurse. Instead, the babies, children, adults and elderly alike showed their hunger for warmth and affection in their grateful eyes and I felt guilty that I held them only to let go again, too soon.

No, I can't single-handedly bring about world peace or end starvation. But I can reach out into someone else's darkness and bring a little light, share a human connection. Connections are, after all, how we define our identity and meaning in life. We are not made to cry alone.

Thank You!
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