sinziana91
Dec 31, 2009
Writing Feedback / teacher's teaching ability, a salary rise and a promotion to a higher level - teachers evaluation [5]
To begin with, a school knows that a teacher puts enough heart and soul into giving knowledge to students. To illustrate, in my home town, one of my teacher Mr. Kong always hands out all papers necessary for a student to pass a final exam. He always acts as a part-time consultant to help out students who have low grades. When given the evaluation form by the dean, almost all students respect him best, which results in his consistent level of teaching throughout a semester.
i don't think you can actually "give" knowledge .. sharing maybe? teaching students?
consistent level? i believe high level would be more appropriate
Furthermore, a school is likely to consider whether one of the teachers is qualified for an increase in a monthly payment. To be specific, in addition to having the ability to teach students, Mr , k ong is taken into account the able one who are given a one thousand dollar next month. When the end of the semester comes, students are required to submit an evaluation form to an office of the dean for consideration. The result is that Mr, Kong is finally cut out for a pay raise.
i don't really understand this sentence: is taken into account the able one who are given a one thousand dollar next month
does mr. Kong take into account or is he taken into account?
The result is that Mr, Kong is finally cut out for a pay raise.
this doesn't sound right to me. you could say something like : Mr. Kong would not receive. and i believe "finally" is unnecessary since the beginning of the sentence is: the result..
More important, a school finds it easy to move one of the teachers to a higher rank. To be specific, Mr, Kong is not only given a salary rise, but he is also transferred to a head of the Academic Department which are responsible for handling educational matters in a school.During the meeting [with all] of the boards of a school, he is selected as one who tends to be chosen for taking on this position, because of his evaluation form handed in by students.
he is selected as one who is chosen? this sentence is not clear enough
because of the results from..
Such form indicates that he is the best one for head of Academic Department.
form or forms?
In conclusion, it cannot be denied that if a teacher is evaluated by students, it will provide the following things.
which things? following means you will state them next
A school knows who pay most attention to his teaching career, who are suitably qualified for a pay raise without any doubt, and who has enough qualifications necessary for doing a more difficult position.
pays, who is suitable or who is qualified (but not both)
To begin with, a school knows that a teacher puts enough heart and soul into giving knowledge to students. To illustrate, in my home town, one of my teacher Mr. Kong always hands out all papers necessary for a student to pass a final exam. He always acts as a part-time consultant to help out students who have low grades. When given the evaluation form by the dean, almost all students respect him best, which results in his consistent level of teaching throughout a semester.
i don't think you can actually "give" knowledge .. sharing maybe? teaching students?
consistent level? i believe high level would be more appropriate
Furthermore, a school is likely to consider whether one of the teachers is qualified for an increase in a monthly payment. To be specific, in addition to having the ability to teach students, Mr , k ong is taken into account the able one who are given a one thousand dollar next month. When the end of the semester comes, students are required to submit an evaluation form to an office of the dean for consideration. The result is that Mr, Kong is finally cut out for a pay raise.
i don't really understand this sentence: is taken into account the able one who are given a one thousand dollar next month
does mr. Kong take into account or is he taken into account?
The result is that Mr, Kong is finally cut out for a pay raise.
this doesn't sound right to me. you could say something like : Mr. Kong would not receive. and i believe "finally" is unnecessary since the beginning of the sentence is: the result..
More important, a school finds it easy to move one of the teachers to a higher rank. To be specific, Mr, Kong is not only given a salary rise, but he is also transferred to a head of the Academic Department which are responsible for handling educational matters in a school.During the meeting [with all] of the boards of a school, he is selected as one who tends to be chosen for taking on this position, because of his evaluation form handed in by students.
he is selected as one who is chosen? this sentence is not clear enough
because of the results from..
Such form indicates that he is the best one for head of Academic Department.
form or forms?
In conclusion, it cannot be denied that if a teacher is evaluated by students, it will provide the following things.
which things? following means you will state them next
A school knows who pay most attention to his teaching career, who are suitably qualified for a pay raise without any doubt, and who has enough qualifications necessary for doing a more difficult position.
pays, who is suitable or who is qualified (but not both)
