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Jan 13, 2010
Scholarship / Obstacles in my life (no father, sick mother, and diseases consuming my family) [3]

Hello

I was going to say exactly the same as jeannie. I think that you should talk more about how all of these adversities forged the person you are right now. Your story is interesting and touching but I think that you should talk more about yourself rather than just tell and tell and tell and tell what are the horrible things that have happened to your family. This is actually what your essay is about right now.

Specifically tell us what was going on through your mind when all of this occurred and how you managed to think more positively.

Good luck.