Graduate / Statement of Interest for MSc in Mechanical Engineering [3]

I have few tips to give you. Google what are the main point that a statement of purpose should have...
Statement of purpose is not an essay on you CV. It should include your research interests ambition, your capabilities to achieve goals and what will you do after achieving these goals...

Give your experience as your achievements...
Person who is reading this has never seen you. You should give him/her the feeling that you are capable of doing a great research...

best of luck

Writing Feedback / " GRE essay: Laws should not be rigid or fixed. .. [4]

I have a small suggestion. State your claim clearly at the begining