Writing Feedback / CCF - Tommy Douglas - A Scottish Baptist minister family member [NEW]

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A Scottish Baptist minister and his family came to Weyburn just in time to
experience the Great Depression and stayed to leave a mark on the city, the
province and in Canadian history amongst this ministers family was an eight
year old boy named Tommy. Tommy Clement Douglas was a man who contributed a
lot to Canadian society in his lifetime. Tommy Douglas and his family
immigrated to Winnipeg, Manitoba in 1919. As a child Douglas spent his
formative years in Winnipeg, in a home where politics, philosophy and
religion were common topics discussed over the dinner table. Douglas was
deeply affected by the living condition that families lived in and the
suffering he witnessed that were brought on during the Great Depression in
his hometown of Winnipeg, Manitoba. At age 10 an emergency visit to the
hospital made a significant impact on Douglas and served as an inspiration
for his dream of universally accessible medical care. In his youth Douglas
tried different types of occupation such as: amateur acting, boxing, and was
an apprentice printer. In 1924 Douglas enrolled in a liberal arts college
organized by a Baptist church whereupon Douglas found his true calling.
After several post-graduation years working as a minister in the depression
era Saskatchewan, Douglas' political affiliations began to formulate when he
made the move towards politics in 1935. He was then elected as an MP in the
Co-operative Commonwealth Federation (CCF).

Tommy Douglas was born October 20, 1904 in Falkirk, Scotland. Both his
parents were Scottish. The Douglas family emigrated to Winnipeg, Manitoba in
1910. The Douglas family then returned to Glasgow, Scotland, during World
War I, but came back to settle in Winnipeg in 1919. In 1924 Tommy Douglas
was enrolled at Brandon College in Manitoba. Brandon College, which was
founded and run by the missionary Baptists of Ontario, and provided young
ministers with an opportunity to receive an educational background. Douglas
completed his MA in Sociology at Hamilton's McMaster University and did
post-graduate studies at the University of Chicago where he studied the
living conditions of the homeless. In the winter of 1929 Douglas, involved
with the community church as a student minister was asked to come to the
Calvary Baptist Church on a trial basis. He was not yet ordained, but the
congregation wanted to look him over and see if he was what they were
looking for in a minister. At the time Tommy and his best friend, Stanley
Knowles, both came to Weyburn on trial, preaching alternate Sundays. But it
was Tommy Douglas who the congregation decided upon, and asked him to return
after his ordination in 1930.

As a child Tommy Douglas' behavior and characteristics reflected the traits
and personality that he would be greatly admired and known for in the
future. Douglas as a child would perform monologues and recited poetry at
family gatherings and would take small roles in the Winnipeg vaudeville
theatre. Douglas impressed a local theatre owner so much that the theatre
owner offered to pay the young Douglas' way through formal drama school but
Douglas rejected the offer. Douglas told an interviewer years later that he
"didn't want to be an echo of someone else's lines. He wanted to make up his
own lines in life." On June 21, 1919 (famously known as "blood Saturday")
Douglas and his friend were delivering newspapers and witnessed a conflict
between RCMP Officers and striking workers, which resulted in two deaths
during this event. J.S Woodsworth, the founding leader of the CCF was
arrested. J.S. Woodsworth at the time was the Douglas family's pastor.

Elected June 25, 1944, Tommy Douglas and the CCF formed the first socialist
government in North America. In the shadow of the Second World War,
Saskatchewan's voters were persuaded that their provincial government needed
a more ambitious agenda that would be aimed towards full employment, public
health and social well-being. Premier Douglas assumed the role of Health
Minister in 1944-1948. Some of Douglas' major innovations as Health Minister
included: Free health care for pensioners, free cancer treatment for those
in need, the creation of the College of medicine at the University of
Saskatchewan. On January 1, 1947- Douglas created Canada's first universal
and compulsory hospital insurance plan (the Universal Hospital Service
plan). The plan offered: Expanded hospitals facilities (21 new hospitals
over 4 years), Common drugs and other hospital services, Compensation for
share of out of province medical costs. The government also re-organized the
public school system in order to equalize condition and enrich the quality
of education at the time. The department of Education created the following
reforms: Increased wages for teachers, with a new salary structure, a new
system of school grants, and an increased educational budget. The Douglas
government created important trade unions legislation and created many of
the rights that workers now take for granted such as: The Trade Union Act-
Revolutionary in Canada, the act guaranteed for workers the right to
organize and to bargain collectively (It also created the Labour Relation
Board), The 44-hour week was made mandatory, Employers were forced to
provide their employees two weeks vacation with pay. Douglas introduced many
more innovations and made countless improvements to Federal and provincial
governments in areas like Social

Grammar, Usage / Reference Citation and Bibliography [8]

Hi I was just wondering if you could find anything wrong with my citation and bibliography

Reference Citation

Suzuki, D. (August 18, 2006). Public doesn't understand global warming. Science Matters.

Suzuki, D. (July 7, 2006). New act could ban dangerous pesticides. Science Matters.

Mckibben, B. The environmental issue from hell. In D. Spears (Ed.), Improving Reading Skills

David Suzuki. (2006). In Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia.

Suzuki, D. (Director/Researcher), Walker, D (Producer). (1998). Nature of Things: Nuclear Power

Suzuki, D. & Dressel, H. (2002). Good news for a change: How everyday people are helping the planet. Toronto, ON: Stoddart Publishing Co

Suzuki, D. (August 18, 2006). Public doesn't understand global warming. Science Matters.

(Thesis statement is David Suzuki made us aware of the threat humanity poses to the natural environment through its careless misuse of chemicals and gases)

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David Suzuki tested the general public on global warming and discovered that the public has mixed knowledge of what this major environmental issue is. Some of the examples he gives us of the causes of global warming include industries and vehicles that use fossil fuels, and aerosol cans that use CFCs. Furthermore, he assumes by now everyone should have basic knowledge of the issue and consequences of global warming. Suzuki believes, given the media bombardment surrounding global warming, people must surely be aware of this problem. In his opinion the public and governments should view this as the primary problem today.

Suzuki, D. (July 7, 2006). New act could ban dangerous pesticides. Science Matters.

David Suzuki believes the new Pest Control Act is important for protecting the safety of Canadians from hazardous pesticides and agrees pesticide manufacturers should reveal why their products remain legal and available to Canadians. He mentions that Canadian jurisdiction fails to protect the public from dangerous chemicals in pesticides. Some chemicals he lists are atrazine and 1,3-dichlororopene which are banned by OECD nations. David Suzuki proves the false belief of pesticide manufacturers, that their products do not harm human health, with extensive evidence. Some evidence of the negative effects he gives us of pesticides are impairment of reproduction , disruption of hormone levels, developmental defects, high toxicity of the liver and kidneys, and high risks of developing Parkinson's disease. David Suzuki concludes b pointing out that it is the government's duty to protect the safety of its citizens' health.

Suzuki, D. & Dressel, H. (2002). Good news for a change: How everyday people are helping the planet. Toronto, ON: Stoddart Publishing Co.

David Suzuki states there is a consequence for taking metals and fossil fuels from beneath the ground. Some examples of the consequences he gives us for taking metals and fossil fuels are harm to plants, crops, animals, and harm to health of adolescents. He mentions the public should worry about harmful greenhouse gases which are a result of burning wood, coal, and oil. David Suzuki believes alternate fuel sources and better care for trees are a good solution to our economic problem concerning our atmosphere. Some of the alternate fuel sources he advises us to increasingly use are wind, solar, and hydrogen power, which he hopes become more common within business and among nations.

Writing Feedback / What is the career that most appeals to you? [4]

What is the career that most appeals to you? Most people have considered some type of career earlier in life, but I on the other hand did not really have a good idea of what I would do for the rest of my life. In fact I had chosen law and security administration near the end of high school. There will be many future job openings in this career; therefore, I believe that a career in law and security administration would best suit me. I chose this because I will be able to make changes to the local community, because of the influence of friends and family, and of personal and financial rewards.

A career in law and security administration gives me the opportunity to change the local community for the better. First of all, working in this profession will let me apply my already high moral standards, beliefs, and principles for the betterment of society. Such as the goodness, equality, freedom, truth, and justice principles which are deserved by everyone in treatment. Secondly, I as an agent of the law will be able to serve and protect the people. Decreasing crime with the help of the public will result in a lower percentage of fear and a feeling of a safer environment. Lastly, the public will see me as a role model, and I will take pride and honour in knowing this fact. There is nothing better than knowing you changed society's view and trust toward law enforcement officials.

My friends and family were an enormous impact on one of my biggest decisions in life. Firstly, I had heard stories from my mother of how my family back home, mainly my aunts and uncles, that are all high ranked cops or in the military. This made me wonder if I should consider pursuing a career in one of those due to genetics. Secondly, I would not have chosen to enter law enforcement if it was not for a friend who advised me to do so. After much conscious debate on my decision towards entering law enforcement, my friend's advice was the last reason I needed to choose to enter law and security administration. Lastly, during high school, another friend of mine was leaving to join the army. This both surprised and inspired me. In my opinion he did not seem like someone who would fit in the military, yet there he was wearing the uniform and backpack and ready to go. This changed my opinion on a lot of things and made me reconsider my future plans.

The most significant reasons that tempted me into considering law and security administration were the rewards offered by the profession. Firstly, things like character traits, physical fitness, self-respect, self discipline, and courageousness really motivated me into wanting to join. I really wanted to have all these qualities, who wouldn't? Secondly, I looked at things I would need in life out of a job. The salaries and job security in law enforcement intrigued me. In fact, it was more than I was looking for. Also, the experience and desire to succeed was something the job could give me. I viewed this as important. I believed that all people need goals in life, it is a social need. Lastly, this career offered me better retirement in life. I viewed this reward as most important, for this is the last reward that I will acquire from my future career.

There have been many reasons in my life that influenced me to choose this route. The urge to change things, family tradition, and the desire for personal and financial rewards were the main reasons for my final decision. I have no regrets in my decision; I see my future as only getting better with many more important decisions to make and experiences to go through during the remainder of my life.