Undergraduate / statement of purpose for art schools (your personal vision) [3]

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Your Statement of Purpose helps us find out more about your personal vision; Please tell us what your work is about.

I have very little knowledge and experience for art, but what I have now is only passion. I have mainly done paintings and drawings but during the process of the portfolio, I decided to take the risk to experiment with different types of media. I believe that it would be a good opportunity to create more diverse art works, and throughout the process, I can identify which ones I like or do not like.

My art works focused mainly on the human figures. I used to avoid on that part when drawing because they were difficult and never was satisfied in doing so. To work on my weakness, I purposely tackled this particular subject. "Practice makes perfect", I practiced drawing faces and bodies on my sketchbook until they looked real. Also, I admire the works of Auguste Rodin. His sculptures were so fascinating, full of expression and life, his works were my inspiration.

Art is spontaneous, don't always try to plan everything, let your mind flow naturally. My art teacher handed me a bunch of materials, without any other instructions, told me to create something. At first I was confused, I had no plans, no directions to go to, no concept. However, I started doing something, and in my mind, kept thinking what would be best to do while working. Instead of me working on the art, it turned the other way around.

Undergraduate / interest and preparation for art school -(feedback) [5]

Submit two examples of writing, each between 200 and 400 words.
In the first, discuss your interest in, and preparation for, a RISD art and design education.

Art used to be a way to escape, which has now become the reality that I have always dreamt of.
The 8 years I spent in Paris since I was 5 is both the best and the worst time of my life. In the eyes of those who have not experienced culture differences, they might wonder how it can be bad and even doubt it. Paris, as known, is undeniably a very charming city. It has preserved its history very well with architecture of various kinds, together with the most famous monuments and museums of the time. However, in the hearts of such wonderful environment, I had to fight against myself to adapt to it. Not able to speak a word of French, I listened in the classroom and hung out with French kids for hours every day. I felt as if I was a mute, I could not say what I wanted, or did not want, no one could hear what my feelings and thoughts were. All the things that I could express in words, I converted into drawings. Unlike the reality, everything would be under my control because I would be creating my own world. During art sessions in school, teachers and peers approached and took interest in what I would do, and that was the time I found myself the feeling of presence.

Now looking back, the French culture plus the language handicap got me to develop deep interest and passion for art. I have been exposed to only a few kinds of Mediums until now, but now I became curious of all others that exist.

I wish to approach art in much more serious manner, and create works that have professional qualities. Attending RISD would be the perfect path for me, the inspiration and real feedbacks, critiques I would get from teachers and my peers would push me to grow as a superior artist. I hope as a RISD student with strong motivation and diverse background can positively contribute to the community.

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