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tramhuong

Feb 9, 2010

Writing Feedback / Toefl; Do clothes have any influence on how people behave? [7]

Hi, here is some feedback:

There is an old saying in C hina ~~that~~" horses rely on their saddles while people rely on their clothes" . However, as far as I am~~in my~~ concerned, clothes are definitely not a thingsthat can control our behaviors. We behave as who we are, ~~but~~ not as what we are wearing.

We have the right to choose~~choice in~~ our clothes, and we can wear what we like. We should be our own master instead of just following the fashion and losing our own style. Remember only the thing that is our owns is the best. We may choose a hat instead of a pair of sun glasses, we may prefer short skirts to long pants. There are so many different people and the same with ~~the~~ clothes. It was we who chose to wear different clothes today because we had a bad day, on the contrary, it can't be true.

Of course sometimes we chose different clothes according to different occasional. The environment made us to behave like a gentleman or a lady in a formal party. So according to the rules, we need to chose a formal suit or a formal dress. The situation is we who are in the formal clothes are gentleman or lady, not only when these clothes on.

If a person needs the clothes to sigh his personality, I can only say it's too pathetic. As an independent human being, our minds which decide our behavior should be independent too. If we can only chase the colorful models in the fashion shows, then where are ourselves? If just beautiful clothes can make you feel like a princess, then the plastic (cosmetic?) surgery should disappear, while the truth is it's been more and more flourishing these days.

Clothing makes this world warm and colorful, but people in the end need more self-awareness than behaving in our own clothes. Ironically, nowadays fashion and entertainment become our oral topics every day, how long have it been for us to stop and see who we are and what kind of people we want to be?

tramhuong

Feb 7, 2010

Writing Feedback / 'no control' - The mass media and their influence on people's ideas [7]

Thank you a lot for your help, Michelle and Kevin.
About"execrable", I think I used the wrong word.
Can I use the word "exessive" instead, Kevin? I mean "In my opinion, it is not excessive to say that they have a great influence in shaping people's ideas, both for the better and for the worse."

Tramhuong

tramhuong

Feb 5, 2010

Writing Feedback / 'no control' - The mass media and their influence on people's ideas [7]

Good morning all!
I'm practicing writing. And this is my first time here. Please help me check this essay!Thank you.

The mass media, including TV, radio and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree this statement? Give reasons for your answer.

The mass media, including TV, radio, newspapers play a very important role in our modern life. They have change our life very much. In my opinion, it is not execrable to say that they have a great influence in shaping people's ideas, both for the better and for the worse.

First, the mass media affect people's fashion. Simply take a glance at the way you dress right now, it was probably something you have pick up over the internet or magazines. What we are wearing may look similar to what famous actors or singers have worn recently. And all of the things we often to is to imitate the models appear every day in fashion shows.

Second, we cannot deny that the mass media have a great contribution to shaping our ways of thinking. What we watch on TV, radio: what we read in newspaper and magazines affect ,without our awareness, a great deal to our thinking. Does what Obama, Bill Gates say on TV mean anything to you? Does what your music idols wear affect your taste of fashion? I definitely believe the answer will be "yes". When choosing what to wear, most of us have a tendency to choose what is said or shown to be fashionable by famous people.

Third, it is obvious that the mass media also play an important role in our attitude to life. Some people complained that children nowadays tend to be lazier and more violent and want to come in for a share of social's product as much as possible. This is simply the result of bad programmes shown on T.V all time, incontrollable websites and even the carelessness of parents. To be free from their children, some people allow the children to surf the webs, without noticing that there are plenty of disasters on Internet which the young have little experience to deal with. People, especially teenagers, always have an idol and they tend to follow what their idols do and say no matter these things are good or bad.

In conclusion, we have absolutely no control over the media. However, we do have the final decision on the path we choose to take. The extent of the power mass media is able to influence us only reaches this far, the rest is really still within our control.