Marcosis
Feb 13, 2010
Writing Feedback / Foster Care definition essay - grammatical assistance requested. [4]
This was mostly fine grammatically, I actually removed a lot of commas in the first paragraph! Other than that I just added and removed commas in a few places, but overall good job.
Foster care, is the temporary placement, of a child outside of the home of the natural parents. Children are placed with a foster family by the state's Child Welfare organization usually due to abuse, neglect, illness, or abandonment or whose parents are unable to fulfill their parenting obligations because of illness, emotional problems, or a host of other reasons including adoption.
This was mostly fine grammatically, I actually removed a lot of commas in the first paragraph! Other than that I just added and removed commas in a few places, but overall good job.