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Marcosis   
Feb 13, 2010
Writing Feedback / Foster Care definition essay - grammatical assistance requested. [4]

Foster care, is the temporary placement, of a child outside of the home of the natural parents. Children are placed with a foster family by the state's Child Welfare organization usually due to abuse, neglect, illness, or abandonment or whose parents are unable to fulfill their parenting obligations because of illness, emotional problems, or a host of other reasons including adoption.

This was mostly fine grammatically, I actually removed a lot of commas in the first paragraph! Other than that I just added and removed commas in a few places, but overall good job.
Marcosis   
Feb 13, 2010
Essays / Homeschooling My daughter Vs. Public School----example essay. [5]

One of the toughest decisions that you are going to face as a parent is that you're going to have to decide where to send your children to get their education.

This sentence might be a little awkward, I would try something more along the lines of "One of the toughest decisions a parent must make is where to send their children to get their education."
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