Writing Feedback / 'just a typical teenager' - Creative writing Who am i? essay [5]

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WHO AM I?
The obvious answer to this question is that I am a senior in high school. But this doesn't define who I am in person, the answer to the question cannot be found in a person birth certificate, his/her religion or his diploma, but it is found in a person heart and soul of a person

I am just a typical teenager, who loves the technology and fun our world has adapted in the 21st century. I was born in India, Bombay in a Muslim family, just five pounds, always crying and ready to take pictures.

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