Writing Feedback / the effects of stress (cause and effect paper) [11]

If I were you, I would take society and individual problems into consideration.(sorry,I am just a learner,not a teacher. Therefore, I cannot give you a good suggestion)

Essays / pros and cons of cars - developing my essay [11]

Thank you very much! I will take time to analysis it!

Essays / pros and cons of cars - developing my essay [11]

Dear Kevin

Thank you very much! :)

But as far as my question is concerned,would you please give me some suggestions?
( it become a problem since the TASK 2 of the IELTS Writting requires no more than three paragraphs containing contents in terms of "for" and "against" of the topic in main body,in addition to introduction and conclusion)

:)

Yours Faifully
Peter

Essays / pros and cons of cars - developing my essay [11]

What I means is that I can hardly put too much points developed in an essay within 250 words(the requirement of the TASK 2 of the IELTS Writting).

I guess what you might confuse is the fact that what these words like "opinion","point","support"refer to,didn't you?

Actually, "opinion" refers to the main view.It's a central idea of an essay.At first,I use "point" to back up the "opinion"; Then,I use "support(support sentence)" to develop the "point".Imaginably,assuming in one paragraph(why is it in one paragraph?That is because a general topic usually contains two sides,"for" and "against",so one paragraph for one side ),if I come up with 6 points covering all aspects to back up my opinion(assuming that my opinion is "for" the topic,and possibly I also think out 3 points to "against" the topic) and I develop each point by using support sentences,the paragraph will be too long.Alternatively,if I separate each point by paragraphing,there will be too many paragraphs.Again,if I remove all the support sentence in order to make the paragraph a suitable size,it will become a list of points.Or,I select one point which is the most important and powerful one to back up my opinion,then,I use support sentences to develop this point.As a result,I get a well-organized paragraph with fully developed point to back up my opinion,but it does not cover all aspects of the opinion.

To be frankly, I really have no idea about that,please help me.

Essays / pros and cons of cars - developing my essay [11]

thank you very much! :)

Essays / pros and cons of cars - developing my essay [11]

Dear Marco Nicita
Thank Q very much 4 ur help! According to ur suggestion,I'v written an essay below.Please give me some advice,thank Q very much again!(importance:The words in brackets are those I am not sure whether I should use it to replace the words out of the brackets)

TOPIC:Some people claim that the disadvantages of automobiles are more than the benefits.Do you agree or disagree?( at least 250 words;IELTS for GENERAL TRAINING)

As one of the greatest inventions,automobiles (cars)have been playing a significant role on boosting the development of modern society,giving an incomparable convenience in people's daily life. Although,its drawbacks on environment should not yet be neglected,in my opinion,with some appropriate measures,cars can be our loyal friends.

The reason why many people would desire to own a car could be the fact that cars can considerably improve people's standard of living.Comparing with other transportations,cars' routes are fairly flexible.Specifically(In other words),cars bring people more freedom and happiness.Take camping for example,driving a car can save precious time for people in their journey and,therefore,bring them more enjoyment at the destination where ordinary public transportation such as railway or airplane could hardly reach.Moreover,if it were not for cars,shopping in distance would become difficult,since people nowadays tend to purchase a large amount of groceries for one week's consumption!

On the other hand(Nevertheless),it is undeniable that the exhaust gases emission of cars are extremely detrimental to our living environment.Those waste gases containing countless toxic chemical substances would be absorbed by raining water,which can acidify our limited arable land and lead to the decrease of gain yield.Furthermore,people who inhale the polluted gases are vulnerable to suffer from lung cancer or others fatal illnesses.However,new energy resources in terms of electricity and eco-friendly fuel have been introduced into car engine,which can radically resolve this problem.

In conclusion, cars are of great importance to people's living and recreations(amusement or entertainment),regardless of what social situation people have. With new discovery of energy resources,cars will be increasingly popular in the future.