Poetry / "Shall I compare thee to a summer's day" Pardoy [5]

HAHAHA I'm so glad it made people laugh!

The orignal is ow'st and grow'st so I just left it the same. The ending is about how women want what someone else has, in this case shoes LOL

Thank you for your help!

Writing Feedback / Finding an ideal community now a days has become a major problem. Vadalism is the threat. [6]

I am not sure what you thesis is. I find having a clear theses makes the writing process easier for me.

Book Reports / "A Jurry of Her Peers" and "Hills Like White Elephants", compare/contrast essay [5]

"Hills like White Elephants" and A Jury of Her Peers" Compare/Contrast Essay

Can someone please look of this and let me know what you think?

The short stories "Hills like White Elephants" and A Jury of Her Peers" share the subjects death and how men and women relate to each other during the respective situations. The characters in both stories are all different types of people but they are connected by how they relate to their: choices; the potential consequences and the uncertainty of both. Both stories also share the use of strong symbolism to convey the setting and create mood.

The stories have strong dialog regarding how unimportant the male characters perceive the women to be. In "Hills like White Elephants" the American merely sees Jig has an object of enjoyment, he can only see how their lifestyle would change if they became parents. It's apparent he does not care about Jig's feelings when he describes the operation as "It's just to let the air in" (40). In "A Jury of Her Peers" the male characters are too busy looking for clues they deem important to even notice what has really taken place in the Wright home. The male characters dismiss Mrs. Hale's and Mrs. Peter's concern for the state of the Wright's kitchen as "trifles" (75). The men do not see how unfinished tasks and broken preserves are abnormal and should be looked into further.

In both stories the women are uncertain of their choices. Jig cleary does not want to have an abortion but does not want to loose the love of her man. This is shown when she describes the hills (the baby) as a white elephant (something special) but later states "I don't care about me" (65). Mrs. Peter's although sympathetic to Mrs. Wright does not fully connect with her until the women discover the strangled Canary. Mrs. Peter's then feels how awful the loss of the Canary must have been for Mrs. Wright when she remembers the "stillness" (255) she suffered after the loss of her own child. The connection is even more evident when Mrs. Peters allows Mrs. Hale to hide the evidence of the strangled Canary. Both stories are also opened ended, making everything even more uncertain. The reader does not discover what choice the couple makes or what is to become of Mrs. Wright.

The use of symbolism in both stories really injects the reader into the settings. In "Hills like White Elephants" the train satiation and landscape symbolize many things. The train station and its two opposing tracks can be viewed has the two choices the couple must face. The landscape on one side is green, lush and fertile symbolizing the baby, pregnancy and family. While the landscape on the other side is dry and desolate symbolizing the abortion and loneliness. Hemmingway makes me feel like I am sitting in that hot train station sweating about which way to go or which choice to make. In "A Jury of her Peers" the Wright's home is described as "down in a hollow surrounded by lonesome poplar trees" (5). I immediately felt that the Wright's had been separated from society. I was saddened when I read that Mrs. Wrights Canary had been strangled. The Canary was Mrs. Wright. The Canary represents young Mrs. Wright full of life and song and in its death an old Mrs. Wright silent and shut away.

Both writers were able to me make feel the emotion of their stories. I felt the loss and loneliness each woman was suffering. How terrible must it have been for all of them to not have the love and support of their men? It must have been dreadful to be making such large decisions while they were being treated as if they did not matter. I can't relate to being treated as if I did not matter but these stories make me understand the loss and uncertainty each of these women are facing.

Book Reports / "A Jurry of Her Peers" and "Hills Like White Elephants", compare/contrast essay [5]

Thank you so much! I have been puzzled on how to start this essay!

Undergraduate / The Art Institute Of Philadelphia Entry Essay [3]

I would find meaning full reasons why you want to attended that school and choosen the major you did.

Undergraduate / My explanation of why I did so poorly for the Additional Information part. [3]

You may want to try the standard essay format of an introduction, a few body paragraphs and a conclusion. I find that if I have strong thesis and topic sentences everything flows better.

Writing Feedback / IELTS essay: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. [4]

Your thesis seems to be unclear. Pick three or more main points and write a paragraph about each. I would also take out some of the leading words like "besides, in addition and eventually".

Writing Feedback / Tony Hoagland's "Romantic Moment" -- personal response essay [4]

Thank you very much for your reply!