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Dav1d   
Mar 16, 2010
Undergraduate / "born in Nicaragua" & "Bump on the road" [5]

i think its already perfect the way it is, but it sounds kind of braggy, i personally thought it was written by a jerk (no offense im sure youre a good person) but thats what it sounded like maybe try changing that a bit
Dav1d   
Mar 15, 2010
Undergraduate / University of Calgary Biomedical Research Program Admissions Essay [4]

The prompt for the essay is:

If you are not accepted into your major of choice (Biomedical, Health & Society, and Bioinformatics) within the BHSc program, which other major within the BHSC would you chose or would you choose an alternative program/faculty at the UofC? Provide reasons why?

the essay can only be 250 words max

this is the essay I came up with:

Although I'd prefer not to think about what I'd have to do if I don't get accepted into UofC's Biomedical Program, I know that there are multiple ways around this minor speed bump in the admissions process. Lucky for me I always like to come up with a back up plan immediately following every major decision I make. In this case my secondary plan of action was almost decided for me.

Knowing the absolute importance of the medical research field, especially in the world we live in today, I know there is a career waiting for me in this utterly necessary line of work. This personal goal of mine made choosing my back up major that much easier to decide and in the blink of an eye I would change my major to Biological Sciences if I knew for certain that the biomedical program was no longer a viable option.

This decision was made simple for me for one very distinct reason. While I do have a variety of other academic interests, they all pale in comparison to the commitment and passion I feel for the medical research industry. Growing up with two parents that are both heavily involved in pharmaceuticals, they nurtured my interest in the sciences from a very young age. As I've grown older I've realized to a larger extent that more than anything else relating to health sciences; the research sector is the foundation that all others rest upon. Bearing that in mind I know that in the event things do not go according to plan, I am prepared to bear the worst of it and continue forward without ever looking back.

I would like for everyone who reads this essay to tear it apart, I can take any critisism anyone throws at me I'm kind of inlove with this program and will do whatever it takes to get accepted. please fix grammar, spelling, syntax etc... anything and everything will help.

One last thing, the word count on this is 276 but the max is 250, is that going to be a problem i should worry about or is 26 extra words no big deal
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