Writing Feedback / My hero, Terry Fox born in Canada [3]

Is is just a part of the essay? It'll be easier for every one to make some comments if you state the purpose of your essay here

Speeches / im writting a oral presentation about myself! [7]

so where's the presentation?

Scholarship / doctorate degree in Computer Science - my scholarship application [4]

What you have achieved is really impressive, but I'd like to hear more about how Optiportal will help Vietnam, you could write some of your imagination, to make it more inspiring.