Posts by crazyman

crazyman

May 30, 2010

Poetry / Letter to a girl (need help with articulation) [6]

What do you think of this modification?

Jessica,

With you, I felt like I had someone for the first time who I could express fervent emotion, benevolence, and affection to more than verbally. I would like to eventually overcome any obstacles preventing us from having a more physical relationship, but I want you to know that I have the utmost respect for your choices. You are one of my best friends notwithstanding.

crazyman

May 30, 2010

Poetry / Letter to a girl (need help with articulation) [6]

Thank you bmachado,

I like some of the changes you made but I have a few questions.

Is there something wrong with the word "notwithstaniding"? I wanted to imply friendship unconditionally without referring back to hardships.

What do you think of the word choice in the phrase "fervent emotion and affection"?

crazyman

May 29, 2010

Poetry / Letter to a girl (need help with articulation) [6]

This is not exactly a poem but I need help with articulation. Please don't take this out of context.

All in all Jessica I felt like I had someone for the first time who I could express fervent emotion and affection to more than verbally. I would like to try to overcome any obstacles disallowing any physical relationship but I have the utmost respect for your choices. You are one of my best friends notwithstanding.

Word usage? Is there something I should replace "all in all" with?