Posts by sezrenei

sezrenei

Jun 15, 2010

Essays / I want to know something about myself ("cold decent boy") [8]

Uh,well,I think if I describe someone "cool",that means she or he is recollected and level-headed.

sezrenei

Jun 13, 2010

Essays / I want to know something about myself ("cold decent boy") [8]

Ooooops!I've never thought the "cold" word could mean more than cool.Thank you for telling me that.

sezrenei

Jun 13, 2010

Undergraduate / "the Redbud Literature Honors Society" - common app short answer [3]

Thank you for your critiques.This a correction:150 words or fewer.
As for the end point,Kevin's suggestions seem good.I think I will adopt both of your critiques and edit methods.I will drop this point .Like Maretta said,joining the literature society can be seen in my activities list,exemplify it simply won't refresh reader's mind.So I will try to find other eperiences that are out of my shown list.Thank you anyway.

sezrenei

Jun 13, 2010

Essays / I want to know something about myself ("cold decent boy") [8]

It's not very difficult to describe your character as long as you've found some proper examples to explain that.For instance, you can site a risk you've taken, academical, leadership elections or extracurricular activities you played a role in. By this, you have to entail how does that experience infulenced you ,or how did that changed your way of thinking.Remember,the risk you've taken is not necessarily to be something heroic, it can be quite trivial.But you have to describe how did that show your poiseness and coldness when you've got to deal with tough circumstances.

I hope this could help you.And I will appreciate it if you could give some critiques to my common app short answer.

sezrenei

Jun 12, 2010

Undergraduate / "the Redbud Literature Honors Society" - common app short answer [3]

I've registered just 5 minutes ago.I really need some suggestions on my short answer,I will appreciate it and return the favor to read your essay if you could read mine.ok,here we go.

The prompt:please elaborate on on one of your activities.[159 words or fewer].
But my short answer is 181 words.anybody could give me some advice on the length?

As I started my first year of high school, I joined the Redbud Literature Honors Society, a league of students who uphold both academic excellence and outstanding skills for writing and criticizing. Upon first entering the group, the Honors society conducted leadership elections to which the members voted and appointed me as president for 2008-2011 school years. With this leadership role, my responsibility to the society entails planning literal and educational activities within and outside the campus, promoting the society to other qualified students, and managing the society's budget collaboratively among the Honors coordinators and other student officials. During those last days of December, 2009, when the average temperature seemed to decrease exponentially, our society's internal ambience was, however, quite torrid. Some students were arguing if my provisional plan for next yeas would be impeccable as they did last year, some launching tirades to ensure hid of her ideas would be acknowledged and approved, if possible. In light of this, my works in the Honors society allow me to develop skills pertaining to effective leadership, time management, and especially group communication.