Essays / Explain introduction? - Statement of Purpose - SCAD (fashion design major) [3]

I am currently working on a statement of purpose. Could you please let me know the adjustments i can do to my introduction to my essay.

This is the first sentence of my Statement of Purpose

Being a part of the Fashion Design program at SCAD will be an extraordinary opportunity for me to contribute to the on going research in fashion design, while providing me with a quality education from beginning to end.