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nathan02079   
May 4, 2009
Book Reports / Given this topic: the play 'Pygmalion', what do you think I am to write about? [14]

So I handed in an outline with the following thesis:

In Pygmalion, Shaw promotes the importance of good appearance, proper language, and class in social standing.

Comments: Why? Why does he feel these are important values? [after reading] Your ideas and evidence are well developed; trry to explain why he promotes these values.

I feel like I should still keep it short. What do you guys think?

Thanks a bunch,

N.
nathan02079   
Apr 27, 2009
Book Reports / Given this topic: the play 'Pygmalion', what do you think I am to write about? [14]

Ah, I get what you mean. I think I will change my ideas a bit then.

'In Pygmalion, Shaw promotes the importance of good appearance, proper language, and class.

Then in each paragraph I think what I would do is describe both how each point was promoted in a good/bad way.
nathan02079   
Apr 27, 2009
Book Reports / Given this topic: the play 'Pygmalion', what do you think I am to write about? [14]

Thank you for clearing it up! Hm, how would this thesis sound...

In Pygmalion, Shaw has put stress on several values including the importance of language, importance of appearance, and the ability to change.

Ned, I love your ideas! I hope you won't mind if I grab hold of them!

Thanks,
Nate
nathan02079   
Apr 26, 2009
Book Reports / Given this topic: the play 'Pygmalion', what do you think I am to write about? [14]

I am to write an essay on the play 'Pygmalion'.

The topic is as follows...'What values is Shaw trying to promote in Pygmalion'?

What exactly are these "values"?

I've thought of money, society, love, etc. But I do not really understand fully what my teacher wants when she says 'values'. I asked her about it and she said 'it's your choice what you want to think of it'. But I am still unsure.

Opinions would be helpful. Thank you.
nathan02079   
Feb 22, 2009
Essays / An argumentative essay on Louis Riel: hero or villain? [11]

Wow, thank you SO much for all this help! I do appreciate it!

When false news and rumors spread westward about Scott's execution, Riel was recognized as a felon and was wanted for arrest.
Is the word "false" supposed to be there? (above)

Well what happened was...Riel had his reasoning for executing Scott. Scott openly criticized Riel in jail, threatened to kill Riel, and abused the prison guards. However, when the news were spread, it made Scott seem entirely innocent and made it look like Riel was just a maniac and an insane killer for executing a believed-to-be-innocent man.
nathan02079   
Feb 13, 2009
Essays / essay- sell something absurd using propaganda techniques [7]

Some absurd things to sell could be...

- a headless action figure
- blank trading cards
- off-key musical turn (you know, that small metal thing)
- ripped shirt
- watch with no time hands
- stringless guitar

Just thinking off the top of my head. Something broken or nonfunctional (not necessarily used) could be a bizarre item.
nathan02079   
Jan 29, 2009
Essays / An argumentative essay on Louis Riel: hero or villain? [11]

I am to write about 5-7 pages, arguing whether Louis Riel, a very important character in Canadian history, is a hero or a villain. I remembering doing a short essay that went on for 4 pages. I'm aiming at 6 pages for this topic, but I think this is the longest essay I will have to write so far.

First of all, I'm not entirely sure which side to argue...he was obviously a hero for these main reasons:

- He was the reason Canada has Manitoba and Saskatchewan
- He stood up for Native rights and defended the Metis
- He wrote up the List of Rights
- Led the Northwest Rebellion of 1885, which showcased the capabilities of the Canadian Pacific Railway

And here are the main reasons why he is a villain:

- He executed Thomas Scott, an Orange Lodge member
- Challenged the government and wrongly viewed their ideas
- Led rebellions against the government
- Ran away to the US after he killed Scott

I'm still wondering which topic I should pick. Also, I asked my history teacher what I can do to make my essay more descriptive. He told me to speak about the opposite first. For example, if I was to argue that he was a hero, I would start of talking about how he was a villain, and THEN talk about how he was a hero, and finish with that.

Is this a good idea? I have not seen an essay written in that manner before.

Help is greatly appreciated!

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To my surprise, my teacher said the essay was fine, and that the paragraphs just needed re-arranging. He skimmed through my essay so far and he said it looked decent. I kept my paragraphs. I guess some teachers have their preference. Anyway, here's my essay.

Social Studies 10 Block B
Mr. M. Quick
February 23, 2009

Louis Riel: A Villain or a National Hero?

Heroes and villains always contribute to all great stories. The story of Canada building up as a nation is no exception. The 19th century was a crucial period in the development of Canada, affected by many controversial heroes and villains. Louis Riel, one of the most controversial figures in Canadian history, is now argued as both a villain and a hero. He was hanged on November 16, 1885 for treason, but was he a real villain? Louis Riel is undoubtedly a national hero because he stood up for Métis rights, was responsible for the formation of Manitoba, and called attention to the Canadian Pacific Railway.

Some may see Louis Riel as a villain because of his initiatives taken against the government. Riel was the leader of two major rebellions. The first rebellion was the Red River Rebellion of 1869. There was a need for the rebellion when the Métis, people with half-native and half-European descent, have had enough of being taken advantage of. Land speculators and surveyors at the time laid out square townships and disregarded the strip lots the settlers were used to have. Rupert's Land was purchased without any consultations with the settlers in the area. The Métis called for Riel, who was the leader of the Métis in the prairies at the time. After unsuccessful deliberations, Riel commenced the rebellion at Fort Garry, where they seized munitions. Riel created a provisional government in the area and tried to negotiate with the Canadian government as much as possible. To add to the adversity, Riel executed a person who went against his provisional government: Orange Lodge member Thomas Scott. When false news and rumors spread westward about Scott's execution, Riel was recognized as a felon and was wanted for arrest. This particular event led the government to see Louis Riel as a national villain.

The second major rebellion that took place with Louis Riel as the leader was the Northwest Rebellion of 1885, which further aggravated the Canadian government. Leading up too the rebellion, the Métis were continued to be unjustly treated by the Canadian government. At the time, the Canadian Pacific Railway was being built, and costs were high. The government cut their budget from its Indian department, which meant that they didn't live up to their side of the deal of the treaties they agreed on with the natives. This action left many Métis dying from starvation. The Métis appealed to Riel, and he concluded that the predicament needed to end. In 1884, Riel returned to Canada from the United States on the pleas of his people. After realizing a harmonious resolution was impossible, he took up arms and prepared for the waves of soldiers from the Canadian government at Fort Carlton. Louis Riel and his army of Métis didn't fall easily-they held off the Canadian militia for some time before they were finally captured and defeated. Riel was arrested. From the government's point of view, the end of the Northwest Rebellion had led them to capture one of the most offensive villains.

Like every other hero, Riel had some things he has done that may have had people mistakenly identified him as a villain. During Riel's time, the 1880s, Riel wouldn't have been seen as a powerful and influential man. Riel lived in Canada. The clash of culture between the French and the English certainly did bring up disputes over land claims, rank in society, and cultural elements. White Anglo-Saxon Protestants were present in the area. Louis Riel was a Catholic French-Canadian in this community. Of course, the society wouldn't regard him as a person of importance. However, Louis Riel eventually gained attention, especially that from the government. The attention wasn't of admiration; instead, it raised awareness of Riel. Louis Riel was seen as a threat to the Canadian government through his rebellions.

On the other hand, Riel was pushed to act the way he did. Cordial negotiations were ineffective, and Riel was pushed by discrimination and racism to rebel. During the late 19th century, the Europeans and the natives lived in the same area, and shared the same land. With their differences in cultures, disputes were inevitable. The Europeans took advantage of the native Métis group. One typical case of dispute would be over land. The English had sophisticated ways of giving title to property. For instance, they ha 'scrips', which were pieces of paper that stated how much land you owned. The Métis were confused with the system, and most ended up being tricked or forced to sell and give up their land a low price, or at no cost at all to the Europeans. Another typical case of interaction would be between children. The Métis children would be sent to distant residential schools, where they would learn the basis of white culture, yet get treated in desolate conditions, where they were prone to abuse. The deals seemed innocent, but the Europeans seldom lived up to their side of the deals. Gradually, the discontent feelings of the Métis built up, and an action needed to be taken. Louis Riel tried to negotiate with the government about the Métis' situation, and that proved to fail.

Although the rebellions may have struck Louis Riel as Canada's national villain, all of his acts have benefited Canada in some way. One thing that stands out about Louis Riel is that he was very passionate about preserving the Métis' rights and culture. Undeniably, he was a true Métis leader. During the Red River Rebellion, he drew up the Métis List of Rights. Not only did he try to defend the Métis, but he also tried to defend the whole settlement under the control of the Canadian government. In short, the List of Rights proposed that all people were to be treated equally, with equal rights to the services and aspects of society, including voting and elections, land purchases and claims, and cultural and language rights. When the List of Rights was exploited, Riel did not desist from further improving the conditions for the Métis. During the Northwest Rebellion of 1885, Louis Riel wrote up the Bill of Rights-this document further satisfied the woes of the Métis. This bill ensured, in detail, that the Métis were to have equal rights to land, a say in elections, access to their necessities, and the same standard living conditions as the whites. Evidently, Louis Riel was a defender of Métis rights and the preserver of Métis culture.

In addition to improving the lives of the Métis, Louis Riel was responsible for the formation of the province we now know as Manitoba. During the Red River rebellion, Riel formed the provisional government and wrote up the List of Rights to help the Métis. This list was later used to base the Manitoba Act-the reply from the government, an act adopted by the Parliament to settle disputes concerning the Métis. The Manitoba Act, somewhat satisfying Métis injustice, proposed that the area of the Red River Colony was to become the province of Manitoba. This meant that roughly 1 400 000 acres in the area was to become Manitoba. The act didn't do only that. The Manitoba Act made French and English the two official languages of the province and it gave the society two education systems: Protestant and Roman Catholic. In addition, the act made sure the area had a responsible government, guarantee of land and property, and fair standings for the natives. In addition to being the protector of the Métis, Louis Riel was named 'The Founding Father of Manitoba'.

Also, Louis Riel called attention to the Canadian Pacific Railway. During the 19th century, the Canadian Pacific Railway was an immense project. John A. Macdonald, together with the railway managers and investors, put in a lot of time, money and a lot of effort in the project in the hopes of connecting Canada from coast to coast with a transcontinental railway. However, the CPR was almost bankrupt in 1885, and it was yet to be finished. When Louis Riel broke out the Northwest Rebellion of 1885, this meant that troops needed to be transported quickly, preferably by rail. Macdonald saw this as a perfect opportunity to finish up the railway. During the rebellion, Macdonald was able to send out troops in bigger proportions within 9 days instead of months. This gained attention from the public, and they viewed the money as a good investment instead of something that went to waste. The Canadian government proved that the Canadian Pacific Railway was a key element to stopping the rebellion. The construction of the CPR continued even after the rebellion, and John A. Macdonald's national dream was fulfilled. The railway led Canada to prosper, with many new, thriving businesses opening up As a consequence of Riel's actions, the Canadian Pacific Railway was recognized as a crucial initiation.

Undeniably, Louis Riel was a national hero, and he still is today. Though he may have done some things that may have upset the government, all of his actions have contributed to building Canada up as a nation. It is still evident today. Canada has the province of Manitoba. Also, the Métis have been recognized, and have grown to be equal in the Canadian society. The transcontinental Canadian Pacific Railway still runs today, thanks to Louis Riel. He is definitely one of Canada's most important figure, and he is unmistakably a hero.


Now that I read it over, I think it sounds a bit too informal, and I definitely think the conclusion needs a-fixin'. What do you guys think? Thank you oh so much for helping me out. I really do appreciate it.

Nathan
nathan02079   
Jan 29, 2009
Book Reports / What is an easy book to do a book report on? [15]

It depends what you mean by 'easy', and, like zowzow said, what genre you want to write about.

I remember doing one on The Davinci Code. Not technically 'easy', but I had fun doing it.
nathan02079   
Jan 29, 2009
Student Talk / How to improve English writing? Learning through reading. [130]

Yeap. Read a wide selection of books, and try to vary in style and author to get an idea of how different authors write in different tones and how they use their vocabulary.

Read newspapers, like EF_Sean said. They are very good sources of information and each article always bring up a new vocabulary.
nathan02079   
May 28, 2008
Book Reports / The Pigman Book Report Help [11]

*sigh* I'm just going to go with this: It's one of the worst essays I've written, probably. But the topic wasn't of interest, so that is why my work is like this. Romeo and Juliet should fix my worries. I'll check in then! Thanks for all the help!

P.S. And thanks for removing my previous posts. (Wait, but why was it removed? Though I felt glad that it's removed...)
nathan02079   
May 25, 2008
Book Reports / The Pigman Book Report Help [11]

Hello!

Sorry for the delay. I just haven't been on the computer much lately due to other homework. Anyway, I've done the peer editing. The bold is the comments that my peers added.


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Overall comments: I suggest better linking of paragraphs, more attention to essay structure, and better understanding of the book (Like the collection thing...Conchetta collected the pigs, not the Pigman!). Also, you need do explain a bit more in some parts of the essay, and make sure the essay doesn't sound too cut up and flows smoothly! Pretty good essay, just needs some polishing here and there!

I still feel I didn't get enough criticism. =P What do you think?
nathan02079   
May 19, 2008
Book Reports / The Pigman Book Report Help [11]

Hello.

Well, I can't really describe what that means either. I meant to say that he's getting really weak and he can't really do anything in life anymore, but I don't really know how to word that into a better format. Anyway, here's my rough draft of the essay. I will bring it in to class tomorrow (probably for peer editing), and I'll get back to you tomorrow night with all the comments! Thanks for all the help so far!

The Man And His Pigs

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I don't really feel good about my essay. It's very short (621 words!). I normally write around 1200 words. I also feel it's really choppy. I don't know if you feel the same.
nathan02079   
May 18, 2008
Book Reports / The Pigman Book Report Help [11]

Hello! Wow, thank you! I didn't actually expect a reply! You boosted me a little. (Maybe it was the heat, too. Where I live right now was blasting away at 35 celsius yesterday! Today it went down to 25.)

Well, so far, here is my essay. I'm still missing some ideas for the second and third paragraph, and I have yet to do the concluding paragraph. I will probably do it tomorrow. It's due on Tuesday. Here goes!


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nathan02079   
May 17, 2008
Book Reports / The Pigman Book Report Help [11]

Hello, I have been on the forums for a pretty long time now, and I find it very helpful. However, when its comes to writing an essay, I get pretty shocked and don't really know what to write about.

I'm in grade 8, and we just finished the book 'The Pigman' by Paul Zindel. We were given a topic: What do the pigs in the book represent for Mr. Pignati when he shows them, and when they later become smashed?

I wrote this so far:

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